somewhere in the silence
(as white as falling snow)
lies distances in time and space
of which we'll never know
where futuristic settings
and places, far and near
tell memories of many things
of which we'll never hear
of polar bears in swimming suits
and having so much fun
of secrets that could shake the earth
of battles, lost and won
of fireflies that dance and sing
and of the trees, so wise
when everyday, it seemed to us
was just a big surprise
of caring less and loving more
making wishes on a star
embracing all our differences
no matter what they are
and fin'lly of democracy
and democratic views
of people who could change our mind -
with just poetic muse.
Author notes
How do I change it so that in the corner I can take off "adult" and "reward"?
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flawless.
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This was really good and flowed nicely. I enjoyed reading it. It was well done. Thanks so much for entering and best of luck to you in the contest.
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Thank you for your entry in our contest, it is an excellent read, with good flow and rhyme.
Congratulations on the HM and we look forward to seeing more from you in our future contests...Sue and Jeff
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Omg Elise! This is brilliant!
You're a brilliant woman!
Love the intro && conclusion.
Love the imagery && the flow.
I love it.
Beautiful write.
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SPLENDID
"of fireflies that dance and sing
and of the trees, so wise
when everyday, it seemed to us
was just a big surprise"...this stanza is still echoing in my mind!wonderful word-combinations!
as for the "adult" and "reward" thing, I have the same problem with one of my poems and have no idea how to fix it and I was too lazy to ask the moderators.you should do so thought!
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