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Addictive Addiction

 


 


Personal work assignment...
   Define the following terMs:
obsession, attraction, infatuatIon, adoration
                stop.
define: addiCtion

I belong with you like cHlorophyll in leaves
                cliché
Plus, that pigment leAves [the leaves]

How about,
      colors in the rainbow?
What arE rainbows? illusions.
                  damn. - and they disappear too

           Ahh, but yes
do you see that automatic cLosing door?
The way it returns to the frame
         no matter how many times seParated.
Let's plAy pretend.
      I can be the door
      You can be the frame.
They even fit together perfectLy.

There we go - I created my own cliché.
Shall we celebrate?
My love will have the whisKey,
       on the rocks
[at least love can be confessed]
I'll have the cOgnac
[so I can't fear rejection]

Have you ever heard the saying
                that life is a celebration?
Some famous idiot said that.
   Obviously had too much time
        [in my opinion]
which is fact, by the way

Don't believe me?
Look at history. All opinion.
Yet they're fact.
       Even deity teachings.

But back to love.
In my opinion, you love me.
But that never become fact.
Actually, at least 100 years are needed.
         Forgot about history?
You see, you need to learn.
[the same Way I learn all about my love]

I take my teSts too.
     It's the same concept with mistakes.
     Everytime you make one, you gain Knowledge.
That's what they claim, anyway.
What about repetition?
I'll repeat those mistakes just to hear from you again.
     All those arguments.
I love the fact
     that I can trigger that emotion. any emotIon.

My love said I should kill myself.
                              And I obeyed.

Author notes

Now this is what I call a love poem.
This is for Mike
Random Capitalisation? I know.

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Comments

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  • trekkergirl
    November 19, 2008

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    okay this is creative if nothing else. This mike must be a very wonderful person. Thanks for sharing this creative write and thanks for entering it into my contest.

  • DarkRomantic113
    April 16, 2008

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    I liked how you poke fun at cliches. Made me smile. Now I'm beginning to see the girl I first met. I just wonder, with three more pages to go through, how you will express yourself.

  • Virgoan
    March 16, 2008
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    I almost forgot. Kindly check the rule that entries must exclude photos.


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    March 15, 2008
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    Very creative and very well done
    wow!
    I wish you the very best of luck in this contest!!


  • Naridill
    January 28, 2008

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    *orgasm*


    Well multiple anyway~! This is bunny brilliant and bunny-rific. Love it~! Love it~!

    Thanks for entering,


  • Crazy9Piano8Freak
    January 11, 2008

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    umm. this is very random... and extremely different. I'm sorry but after reviewing my own rules, i decided/noticed that you broke rule number 2 which was no emo, cutting, porn, etc. Therefore I'm sorry to say that you are disqualified. I would send this in a message, but I don't know who you are. Thank you for entering, and I'm very sorry.
    Koko


  • Puking Faerie Dust gold member
    December 29, 2007

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    I liked the concept of this. I thought it seemed a little random, though, and mostly thoughts. I liked that about it, yet I didn't. I liked the rhetorical questions, and some of the sarcasm, it adds a little bite to it. I really liked the ending, also. Wrapped it up nicely, and I didn't expect it.
    Thank you for entering, and good luck
    Jeanette*~


  • Avatar of Innocence
    December 29, 2007

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    It takes a good poem to make me change my mind. While this poem goes against the rules of the contest, I am enamoured with it. I am also eager to critique it if you still want a critique.

    However, I must ask that you remove this poem from my contest and submit another one. I would like to read what else you have


  • GypsyEyes
    December 20, 2007

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    omg. so much math in this! I suck at math! Finals are over today yay! Anyway, on to your poem LOL. It's awesome. Great use of imagery and words here. Nice flow, great job on getting honorable mention in my twins contest and silver in that other one.

  • OurxBeginning
    December 14, 2007

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    Great piece, really unique. Loved the way you worded this one. Wonderful job, and congrats on your trophies.


  • ThatONEweirdChick
    December 1, 2007

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    Wow...I like the approach on this poem.I've never read anything like it...before. I can't really explain how I want to comment it because it's just so..different. But that's good. very good. At first I didn't get the random capitalization and I thought it spelled out something. Hmmm...looking too deep into I guess. A very good poem about the feelings. So interesting! I'm not sure if I really get too much actual hate out of this..but then again. I have to read it once more..
    Thanks for entering.


  • GirlNextDoor
    November 29, 2007

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    very very very very very very good

    Great job. This was very dark . . but funny . . am i sick for finding a dark poem funny?? jummm i'll never know for sure! Anyway, they should have given you the gold but silver is good too !!!! Congrats!

    Lots of hugs & kisses

    GND


  • parachute fog
    November 23, 2007
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    im not going to write what other people have already said. its brilliant.


  • Ryno
    November 23, 2007

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    Do the capitilized words have anything to do with "who" this person is???

    I think you were really strong with your descriptions and emotions towards the first and as we kept going you got more and more emotional, until the ending was just sheer strong emotion. Which is really good in a way.

    Some of your ideas in this are brilliant, you are such a creative writer. You always stop to think about what you can do that will set you apart.

    Thanks so much for the entry!


  • Lost In Dreaming
    November 22, 2007

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    im going with micheal palkoski--i feel smart--lol o have no life---anywho the poem is amazing and cha this is wht i would call a love poem 2


  • korculablue
    November 22, 2007

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    Very interesting

    I enjoyed reading your poem which both unusual and interesting. The structure is loose and comfortable and I felt you were sitting somewhere offering a series of random thoughts on various points within the main overall topic which is love, your love for someone?

    You got me to think about life being a celebration and the opinions through history, but my favourite bit was your comment on rainbows! Yes they do disappear and are I guess, illusions, but they are often part of our dreams and there you go....dreams are often illusions because reality stalks waiting to jump on them and make them disappear.

    I'm new to Allpoetry, so I can't hazard a guess as to who you are thinking of in your intriguing images of love, but this is a fascinating poem and best wishes for your success with it.

    korculablue


  • Jesusdancer
    November 22, 2007

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    mchelakowski

    those were the letters capitalized. what does it signify? towards the end, it is a little clearer when you capitalie the first letter of words like Knowledge, but i still feel like i am missing a huge chunk of meaning!

    i like it. nice try at trying to make something as irrational as love rational


  • grannyeri gold member
    November 22, 2007

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    Looks like this is written for Michael. Kind of like an acrostic with the capitals inside the lines instead of on the outside looking in, or at the first of each line. Quite unique the way you did this. Random Capitalization - not really, it was well planned and thought out.

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