Take a look at my body,
Lay your eyes on my skin,
Beneath these white cells,
So much more is hidden,
Each line of enamel,
As it runs down my back,
Perfect corners defined,
Now the poison they lack,
Broken promises left,
Where the fat used to be,
So fragile, so pretty,
So much less now to see,
Lustful nights chipped away,
At 11 stone me,
Now its going so well,
No more secrets to tell,
Every secret I hid,
Now shining through skin,
Bones pushing past scars,
All to cope with your sin,
Every secret I hid,
My body now shows,
Spell it out with my ribs,
With my spine hair and hips,
I don't speak with my lips,
My body lets everyone know.
Author notes
One I wrote while recovering from an eating disorder though never posted. The 'poison' mentioned here is infact food. Though it relates to me, it is not about me. Just an expression of how people might cope. I never got that thin.
The 'sin' refers to the 'lustful nights' mentioned, ie. sexual abuse. Here an ED is shown as a coping mechanism.
Please tell me what you think
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Very well done. I use to be anorexic.. now I'm really large, which doesn't bother me at all. I enjoy who I am and have embraced the fact that I don't need to be thin to be happy.
This poem is very well written and is very relatable for me. Excellent work and thanks for sharing. Kahy -
Wow! Beautifully written.
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im so glad that you never reached the goal of becoming that thin...this is a great poem!! the imagery is really defined and i can sense the pain inside
i know your pain, keep up the good writing, im glad that I came to read your work now i have a little time to xx
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i lovedd from your third stanza down. it described the struggles with eating disorders perfectly and the tone of your words captured the emotion very well. i can really relate to this.. i hope you're doing well thank you for sharing this.!
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Great big hug x
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this was amazeingly writtern it had dark places but it also has a sese of hope taht you could over come this ed
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wow, amazing write hun.. i can relate to this....keep it up xxx
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i like this poem
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Damn. Wow, Strong and emotionally heart throbbing. To each verse is like a tighter grip on my chain pulling me closer to graps onto the next verse to feel to see a return of salvation within. Whew God damn i say excellent write simply amazing. And i feels you on the SB part just my case went more deeper with horrible nightmares if you catch the hidden words im hiding inbetween there. But great write Love.
Sincerely,
Lonelywolf Tasagka
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oh wow. that was so amazing. I loved the whole thing...can't point out a specific fave part... but I loved this very very much. awesome!
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Very Well Spoken!
I, myself had an eating disorder 7th to about 9th grade..I got very thin, but then a friend of mine made me see how sick I was becoming...I and have since recovered..Filling out my figure very well..I enjoyed this poem, you captured the emotion very well!
Keep up the great work!
Love & Kisses,
The Dark Raven
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that is a really meaningful poem. Having suffered from anorexia myself, i can relate to the secrecy and 'broken promises' you talk about in this poem. I like the structure too.
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Wow, that is REALLY good! Great job! I'm glad you've gotten past your eating disorder! YAY! *hugs*
How have you been?
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