Hear the loud sound
of joy pulsed through red
feel the immersed heat
that comforts you in bed
extension of soul
for life is for the bold
behold for it beats
to the music of you.
Author notes
Prompt:"There is thunder in our hearts"
In a list
A contest entry
- quote-inspired 20-line-or-less creative free verse by Dienush.
1600 points, ended November 28, 2007, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Mmm... outstanding poem with a touch of excellence par intellectualism. Yes, the music is there in every beat. Well knit. Good work dear. I would be happy, if you could spare your time to stamp your impressions on my poems too.
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Aw. That's very beautiful. I like it. It's very short but refreshing. Great write.
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This was so beautifully written.. the imagery was amazing for such a short piece.. Bravo!! I'm glad to see that you got gold on this...Great write..
Jetleena
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This Deserves The Gold Trophy
Very good verse and the trophy belongs to this. Your word usage is unique and that makes your style one of a kind. I hope you have a book, and if not you should be working on one. Keep writing and I'll keep reading.
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That was a fantastic piece of writing there. Loved the rhyme too. The flow was wonderful. Really deep piece this was. Well done.
Love
Wayne Leon
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Wonderfully Weaved!
You have skills, and lots of soul!
Thanks for sharing here, and congrates on a Gold well earned!
Peace, Timothy aka poeticweaver~ x
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This is very powerful. Life we often take for granted, so it's nice to see someone bring this up. As you said,
for life is for the bold
behold for it beats
to the music of you.
I could not have said it any better.
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yup ,yup!
for life is for the bold! what a statement, what a write!
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words pulse rhythm in this well crafted piece...good soft rhyme and a perfect ending...congratulations on the Gold.
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a good poem, thunderous expectations travel with every ebat that's thrown into life's crazy way. the music plays on.
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This is a wonderful write, and so deserving of the gold! Your words just flowed so gracefully!
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Your poem captures the loudness of the heart beat when it is aroused by another. Congratulations on the gold.
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The image it drew for me was idk. just warm. it gave me a warm feeling and just reading it made me enjoy it. haha. Good feel to it, i liked it a lot
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thank you so mucg :->
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This got a well deserved gold! It's beautiful! Like a snuggle poem.
Love,
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I love the layers of function of your heart imagery. This is really beautiful and compelling. Also, i think the scattered rhyme leaves a freedom for movement and interpretation that can be more difficult to achieve with a tighter structure. Really well done. And I love the message!
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A nice write, however, the last three lines make it happen. Good work and happy trails
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I like this. It's short enough to keep attention and it's creative.
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wow.... dats nice. really nice.... short but wow.
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Mmm... well done. Short but powerful. I like this a lot. I will have to check out more of your stuff.
One Love,
John
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this is very lyrical, you make your opinions known esp about the bold, and it feels like you've lived and are celebrating that and the people who have lived it with you. maybe i"m reading too much into this, but that is what I thought.
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You're right...You read into it perfectly!
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this is a beautiful take on the prompt... very moving, something raw and primal about it, but it does not detract from the loveliness...
those first two lines captured my interest and held me captive from the get go...
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i love this
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Thank you for the awesome comment!
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Being deeply impressed by these beats of love.
The implicit explicitness gives love a beautiful name.
Brilliant writing!
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Thanks so much bean! Writing this came to me so effortlessly on a day when nothing ran smoothly. Smile.
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This one has a lovely rhythm, or if you would like to say... A lovely beat
Very nice idea. Lovely poem
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Beautiful! This is so rich and rhythmic, the words pulse along with the imagery. Congrats on the gold!
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Worthy of the gold indeed!
This is beautifully penned.
Congrats on the well deserved trophy...
Blessings! Tammy
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Thank you so much for the lovely comment!
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I agree with Explicit 1 Your style of writing is unique and I love how you make a picture & feelings with your words
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Thank you darling. I'm glad you enjoyed the write.
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This Should Have Won The Gold
I love your writing style. You have a way with words. I call this talent and poetry. I will be reading more of your poems. Keep writing and I'll keep reading. -
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Wow, thankyou for the awesome comment. I love to write, and I do hope you keep reading my works that would mean the world to me.
Thank you!
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Richard to recieve such a comment as yours for my little poem means a great deal to me. I have high regards for you and your work!
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Finally someone has understood what I meant with this contest! This poem is so powerful and vivid, it even sounds like thunder, and it shows love well.
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I don't see how anyone could come up with a better image for the prompt. This is vivid, passionate and free flowing. Well done!
Love,
Amera♥
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Amera, thank you so much or the comment.
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