The blinding eye of death
slowly set on the western horizon.
The birth cry of the cocooning night
exploded into the sky
with the light of a million stars.
The scent of deadly nightshade
and funeral lilie's
drifted across the graveyard
carried on a cool spring breeze.
The father of all nightmares
picked up the alluring scent
and stirred in his earthen bed.
It was springtime,
everything was in bloom,
including the virgins!
Puberty past
young rose buds
that would open...
to his desires!
It had been a long
cold and lonely
fruitless winter
and he was hungry
in both
stomach and loin.
Eerily the hinges creaked
as he opened the lid
of the mahogany box
he had lain in
for far too long!
Stricken with grief
over the death
of his dammed soul mate!
The pain had carried him
through the winter
of his...
broken black heart.
Not once had he fed,
not once had he slipped
his blood gorged member
into the valley
of his earth bound desires.
He had grieved as long
as his instincts would allow.
It was springtime in the village
and the virgins were waiting.
From a slit, cut into the heavy door
Of his mausoleum,
he had watched her
all winter.
Every evening
at the twilight hour
when his death
became life
and dusk
swept across the land
she would visit the grave
of her departed true love.
Wearing the cloth
of the convent
but...
not yet married
to God!
He could hear
the beat of her heart
pounding...
beneath her supple
ripe breasts.
The pace of the beats
quickened
as she laid on his grave
and slipped her hand
through an open seam
hidden in the fold
of her dress.
Searching
for that steamy mound,
she had saved for him!
As she arched her hips
in ecstasy
amidst the muffled moans
of her forbidden fantasy
salty pearls of sadness
ran from her eyes.
The bane of her beloved
could stand no more!
He opened the door
for the first time
since the death
of his mate
and the death
of her executioner!
The one...
this virgin...
so passionately cried for!
Gone...
but not forgotten
in both of their hearts!
Still writhing in ecstasy
from this Sado-Masochist display
of lust and grief
he floated across
the hallowed ground
touching down
just a few feet from
the foot of the grave.
He leaned forward
feet leaving the ground.
Slowly,
he lowered himself.
His body and cape
completely enshrouding her
until he could feel
her breath on his cheek.
He whispered his greeting
A fell voice in the air.
She opened her eyes
nostrils flared
eyes opened wider
but no scream came
only submission.
His blood gorged member
brushed against
her swollen mound
still hidden
beneath her dress
and she moaned
still twitching
from her self induced
ecstasy!
He slid his ice cold tongue
into her moist hot mouth
and his cold black heart
warmed...
just a bit.
He sliced the strings
with his razor sharp nails
and her bodice tumbled off her
exposing the beauty
of an hour glass waist
and supple breasts
that no man
had ever touched!
Slowly
he traced his tongue
down her
long inviting neck.
Down he went
and goose bumps
followed.
He danced
from breast
to Creamy white breast.
Nipples hard
from one flick
of his intoxicating
tongue.
She moaned
and he swelled.
He could wait no longer.
Pulling up her dress
he slid
his icy dagger of love
deep into her mound
as he sunk
the fangs of commitment
deep
into her lovely
long neck!
Reaching down
with his razor sharp nails
he pulled out
just long enough
to bloody
his throbbing
dagger of love.
And with his next thrust
gave her...
immortality!
Wrapping his arms
around her
he left her neck
and slipped his tongue
deep into her throat
and her hips rose
to meet his thrusts.
And then it happened.
She traced her tongue
to the curve
of his neck
and he felt
two sharp daggers
pierce his skin!
He screamed in ecstasy
as he freed
his dead swimmers
covered in the blood
still pouring
from his member
consummating his marriage!
Tombstones in their eyes
he carried his pale bride
across the threshold
of his mausoleum.
Author notes
http://anarkyman.deviantart.com/art/Bitten-Bride-53037230
BluesMan
50 Years Old
Vampire Kisses
Vampires, Romance and Adventure ...
the Cullins Way
Orange - I want erotica 
Vanilla, Dark, I don't care, but make it semi-tasteful.
14. Anything EROTIC!!!!
Vampire Brides
15.http://www.nocturnusonline.net/images/gallery/whvamp27.jpeg
In a list
A contest entry
- To celbrate my 320th poem!! Come celebrate with me! by Lord Merlynn.
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Comments
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wow wonderful i liked it. it is quite a lenghty piece but i stayed in tune with it for it was plain out awsomenessnesss
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What more can I say than breathtaking, I held onto your every word, thank you for your amazing entry, and good luck in my contest, Josie
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Yet another great dark and yet erotic poem you have woven. You are very creative with these. Some very sick parts which does make a reader react and feel things, and that's a good thing. Good luck in my contest and thank you for entering. Keep on penning for you will go places with these writes. Fantastic!
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Oooh..good poem you got here, tasteful enough lol! Not too over bearing
Good luck.
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OH YES! I was just searching for this poem to comment on it since I wad done with the judging of my last contest (I was sad to see you had removed it 'cause I was looking forward to commenting). And I couldn't find it anywhere when I typed the title into the search. The only reason this didn't get anything for that contest was because it was over the 100 line limit I had set for the entries
But it stands firm and stands tall in this contest
I loved the vividly descriptive erotic tale you wove with this poem. It was like watching a creepy, twisted... almost pornographic horror movie lol. I could see the scenario playing out from all different angles. There were a couple points I cringed and I loved that! I love when a poem makes me react to what I'm reading.
This poem is well deserving of all the trophies it has won.
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wow, very hot indeed.....passion that I would love to experience....
thanks for entering
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beautifully twisted, erotic, and sick. i love this!!! that is a vampire poem i enjoyed reading. such an old story of the vampire, but i don't think it can ever be worn out? thanks for entering xxx
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You touched on so many unspeakable acts.
But you did it very tastefully. This is awesome. I'm speechless. All I can say is wow.
Wow. Thank you for entering my contest.
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Amazing Write.
Dude A Seriously Amazing Write.
An amazing write from amazing talent. You've got a gift. I loved this poem, you did a really great job with it. Very mind numbing, sense enhancing and captivating. Great write indeed ! -
I will bookmark this to read later. It is far too long and does not fit the contest rules. First is way above the maximum line limit which is 60. Second, it had received at least two gold trophies. I said you cannot enter a poem that has previously won gold.
Please keep your poem so I can read it later.
However it will not place.
Nooni
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Wow, this was spectacular! I loved the story you told, and the luscious ways your words flew together, stunning
Favorite line
"It was springtime,
everything was in bloom,
including the virgins!"
Perfection
~Serenity
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"Tombstones in their eyes
he carried his pale bride
across the threshold
of his mausoleum. "
stunning. loved this part.
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That was the hottest poem entered. I asked for no erotica, but you made me change my mind, lmao. This was super hot and super unholy. Wonderful entry, best of luck to you!
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I'm sorry, but this went over the line limit. I was entranced for awhile but slowly lost interest. It was pretty awesome though.
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Very nice, you had me from the beginnig. Good luck, good job and thanks for entering my contest.
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wow that was amazing. i had to remind myself to breathe in certain parts... wow. very well written and worth all the trophies you've won. you might just win yourself another here!
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Very nicely written I really enjoyed this alot. You did a great job with this. I really like it. Thank you for sharing this with us.
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Stricken with grief
over the death
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This is quite the long piece of peotry indeed and has quite a pedigry.
I did enjoy reading it all the way through but for me the first opening salvo had me hooked
"The blinding eye of death
slowly set on the western horizon.
The birth cry of the cocooning night
exploded into the sky
with the light of a million stars."
That is most excellent in deed.
I like it, I like it so!
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Good poem and very well written. It is rather long but still held my interest to the end.
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WOW I need a cold shower and at complete loss for words. Thank you for sharing and best of luck in the contest.
-Please do not respond till AFTER the contest
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wow
wow,
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A vampires romance! Dark and so haunting! Nice job...thank you so much for the entry!
Az
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Well bugger me that is one long ass write !!....
but it kept my attention from start to finish
I love dark writes, and you also brought the sensual to it
Nice Job
Thankyou for your entry
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Well this was an enthralling read, told a strong story.
Thanks for the entry!
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wow.....vampires sex is ummmmm very sexy. I am wet lol. I really thought this was freaking hot.
The Positives:
This was amazing so sexy and erotic! It was full of some wonderful imagery. I really loved every last moment of this. I was so turned on.
The Negatives:
None Not a single thing wrong with this I loved it!
My Favorite Part:
And then it happened.
She traced her tongue
to the curve
of his neck
and he felt
two sharp daggers
pierce his skin!
He screamed in ecstasy
as he freed
his dead swimmers
covered in the blood
still pouring
from his member
consummating his marriage!
Oh man that was so sexy. I was blown away by this.
Overall:
Great i really loved how this was written. I would give this a 10/10 I am going to add you to then finalist list. I hope to see you in my future contests. Thanks so much for entering!!
~*~Apathetic Poison~*~ -
Amazing tale in verse...Thank you for entering our contest...novy & brazos
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wah really good right! imagery was intence! you are very talented thanks for entering this in my contest! Good luck and keep writing! once again WOW
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ahh.. very lovely.. we had a little chat about this poem once before. I will give you a 5 in the wow factor because I just couldn't stop reading it again. You've got a total of 33 points. thanks for entering and best of luck to you. kahy
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AMAZING! A little long but AMAZING good luck
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Ummmm. wow that was different. high points awarded for keeping me awake lol. high points for your realisti but not overtly gross sexual language. and the exploding ending was definately there.
i am not sure if it was enough to send you to the next round, i will have to think it over. but your poem has been noted in my mind that if there is a place left, I will not think twice about who would deserve it.
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woah woah wooaahhhhh. i love this, i have no words!!!!!!!!!!!!!
s.sora -
now that I got some points thaought you would love some and good luck
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diffrent then what I have read but it was good thank you for entering in the contest
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I enjoyed this but it was more like a story and you mispelled "pounding" wrong. AT some part of the work the grammar needed help. I must say though that the poem was very deep and interesting. Their was a suffienct details that made imagery very detailed and powerful. The mood was scary and enjoyable.
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lol this started out almost gravely.. but ended up wonderfully. You've won so many trophies for this poem.. It's good to see that other's appreciate your writing skills. Excellent work.. So secret admirer it is.. Thanks for entering the contest. Kahy
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great poem one of your best thanks for sharing good luck
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Thrillingly erotic! Very descriptive and sensual, with that undertone of feral desire. Absolutely adored it! And the fact that you managed to create such a thrilling scene between two so different beings added to it so much more. The image of the vampire creating a bride from what seems to be a nun-to-be (or so i'm assuming from the lines about the convent robes) is so striking! Found myself wishing to be the girl, honestly. If only vampires were real and the experiences was that erotic!
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Thank you for the wonderful comment. Did you miss the poetic justice in this poem?
Everybody misses the fact that the womens dead fiance was killed by the vampire because he is the man who killed the vampires wife! -
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Now that you say that, i can see it. i think it's because you don't make the direct connection, it feels a little more implied.
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ver long but not bad
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umm... wow.. just... wow.
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This is a bit too! erotic for me... thanks for entering anyhow, I can at least say you know how to use description.
Laura -
wow, very detailed without being too dirty. eroctic and sad at the same time. very long but good.
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Fantastic story!
Great imagery!
Thank you for entering.
~Pastel
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Wow. I really liked that. Very good imagery and discriptions and unique. I highly enjoyed it. Thanks for entering and good luck!
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This is a good write...but not right for this contest...Goodluck in all the others.
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a lot long but verry well writen
it relates 2 me a vamp....lol
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It was amazingly written, but i did specify, no erotica in my rules. I'm really sorry but i'm gonna have to DQ. I really am sorry. The part about the vampire bit was absolutly amazing and the language was great, but it was erotica. Sorry
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A little long, but extremly well writen
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Wow..This was..ayayay! Haha. Great imagery! Long and I enjoyed reading it too! So thank you for entering my contest and good luck to you! Please mention the line "the itsy bitsy spider climbed up the water spout" in your AN along with your Option Number. You'll know why I want it there if you've read the entire contest page Thank you once again!
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thanks for sharing this write with us and thanks for entering it into my contest.
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"everything was in bloom, / including the virgins!" Made me laugh so hard...
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Congrats on all the shinys!
A wicked dark write, love the imagery protrayed! Awesome! Congrats on the attire and good luck in this contest
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This is absolutely amazing. I loved the dark descriptive way that you told this wonderful story.
**Ktulu Blackwolfe** -
This is breathtaking! I really love this piece. One thing I did notice is that you said Sato masochist instead of Sado-Masochist. But other than that it's perfect. A truly great write. Thanks for sharing it with me. Best of luck in the contest.
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Wow, very well done.
Love it.
THanks ever so much for entering,
best of luck.
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wow... this is both distrubing and very sensual man oh man this is pure passion here... it seems graphic but you used well your poetic strategied and made it poetic which is what I wanted in the sensuality subject.
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Unexpected
This is most definitely Disturbing
But in a seductive,sexy way. You mislead the reader, or me at least, to thinking of this woman as a victim. But as the time came it was a climatic twist.
I will this poem could use some polishing and better verbiage, but the content is fantastic. Very unique; shows a large imagination. This had a great combination of different genres. We shall see how your tale will lead you in the contest...
Fresa Salvaje
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Holy cow that was a long write but well worth the read, nicely penned with a little intrigue, best to you
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Darkness
Dark eerie wonderful tale of vampyre love with a classy touch erotica, the enhances the read perfectly...You have some beautiful word use, and imagery.....novy
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Wow
That was different! very sexy and good story told. Way to go -
The contest has ended and we (Dark and I) are now judging. Best of luck and thanks so much for entering.
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For Twisted Love Contest
Wow. Just Wow. There's a lot in this poem.
First few verses, paint a picture of the area in which this twisted story took place. I can see this being about vampires, but it makes me think more about sex offenders. I know, that sounds extreme and I am so wrong. But, it makes me think of that. The verses, remind me of a man who likes young girls, especially virgins. This man in this story likes to observe his victims before he does anything. He picks a victim. A girl who resently lost her beloved and still is a virgin. One day, when he was observing her, going to her beloved's grave, he noticed that she masturbates at her beloved's grave. At that point, he just can't take it anymore. He attacks her. They fight, she even attacks him, that's where "...the two sharp daggers
pierce his skin!" came from. But, she can't get away from him. He rapes her and kills her.
Some Bible Lover once told me that the first man a female has sex with, even if it's rape, forever belongs to that man. The ending reminds me of that. Like a forbidden marriage. She forever belongs to the man who raped and killed her.
Again, I know it sounds totally out there. I know that it's about vampires. But, it also makes me think of that.
Beautiful write.
Very twisted.
Very detailed.
Very nicely worded.
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Ooooh
that was *coughs* hot and you know I love Vampyres *I think I need a cold shower Sweaters.
Reaching down
with his razor sharp nails
he pulled out
just long enough
to bloody
his throbbing
dagger of love.
And with his next thrust
gave her...
immortality!
such a lovely and passionate scene, really.
Sweaters twisty points are your department but I would have to say this was pretty twisted love
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Wow i see you have had some very good reactions on this poem. I enjoyed reading it very much so. thanks for entering my contest and good luck!
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Very interesting. I was caught catching my breath on every last line. Great job.
~Oka/KC -
Hi! This is good
but in the wrong contest. This contest is for "nice characters gone bad" in effect becoming monsters. My monster contest link is http://allpoetry.com/contest/2413297. That one could use a good erotic vampire write. Look forward to finding you there, Bill.
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Thanks for the mazing world of fantasy you've spun for us, and thanks for entering.
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a few things first, because details just bug the hell out of me: you mention shes is wearing a shroud, and allude to her being a nun. no nun wears a bodice. also, while the sex is hot, the words used are repetitive, i can only hear the word mound so many times before i giggle. its interesting that you were able to come up with many different names for the males genetalia, but kind of lost that ability with the woman. the line: "from a slit cut in the heavy door" you have a c instead of a space between slit and cut.
on with the good stuff! i really did like this alot, the story is entralling from start to finish, and is quite sexy to boot. i love the idea of a nun mourning her lost love and masturbating on his grave. very unique. i also love that the vampire imparted his immortality by bloodying his cock. now THERES a unique idea! oh, and the line about "freeing his dead swimmers" classic. really made me laugh. love it. thanks for your entry, this was great!
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there is a lot of amazing imagery in this piece! thank you so much for entering my contest and i wish you the best of luck! ~CarnalNineTailedFox
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Eerie
Your poem is very similar to my own style of writing. I love it very much. I love poems with a thick plot line and you, my friend, have presented me with a delicious morsel on which to gorge. Thank you for the fantastical ride! Best of luck in my contest. -
Whoosh what a read. Great story arch and wonderful construction. The journey through this atmosphere you created was quite a ride. You brought across such a wide range of personal perspective, introspection and interpretation for the reader. Thanks much for great read.
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wow, well done.. erotica usually isn't my thing but this was very well written and I truely enjoyed the read, Thanx for entering and good luck!
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let me add also - this just occurred to me - what an interesting title for this.. i can sort of see where that came from but.. hmm i just really admire you here for this. thanks one more time. ^^
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wow... O.O ... wow. usually i cant hold my interest on a poem that long.. but that one just held me captive. [besides the exclamation points which i understand the emphasis but personally they annoy me a little lol but oh well thats just me ^^] i love the whole idea of it and your description and use of words is astounding.... really well done. this totally appeals to me. i do wonder why you used this background, to me it doesnt really fit. maybe the dark one with the roses but hey im not here to tell you what to do. just simple suggestions. well whatever the poem was nearly flawless... so seriously well done. thank you endlessly for your entry and good luck, i imagine you will place. ;D
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Deep, dark, and erotic, you give an old man a rise! Interesting story, with a little twist in there. Thanks for entering, and good luck in the contest.
Novy&Brazos -
Vampire & a soon to be Nun craving the touch of passion
surely is a dark poem...Thanks for entering..novy & Brazos
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yeah this is tooo long and as "my" contest i asked for GORE and DEATH but here is another story for a whole different topic... Don't get me wrong this is a REALLY good poem just not meant for meh...THANK YOU FOR ENTERING -GOREgous Gore
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Very good you did a great job with this. The last paragraph was a perfect ending.
Thank you for your entry and good luck in the contest -
MAGNIFICENT
I loved it!!!! Simply that! Thank you for adding this truly devine peice to my contest! I am sure you will do well in my contest! -
Burned a hole in my computer screen, this did. This has a heartbeat in the background driving the reader on and enflaming them until the transformation stops the heartbeat. LOVELY imagery, I thoroughly enjoyed this piece!!
Best of luck and thanks for entering!!
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great poem i will be jugeing my contest tonight so good luck. and even if you dont win you will still get some points couse this poem is good.
keep up the great work
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Usually I get easily bored or distracted when I have to read long pieces because of my short attention span but this actually kept me interested all the way till the end!
This part is amazingly written:
"The birth cry of the cocooning night
exploded into the sky
with the light of a million stars."
I also love how you mentioned springtime and virgins, lol. That's nice. Spring is my favourite season! And yeah.. I know, vampires have a thing for virgins, haha!
I also like your phrase "fangs of commitment"! The mention of a cemetary was eerie and definitely a nice touch to the picture I got in my head of this storyline!
Blessed Be,
~Evolet
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I have a secret fantasy of having sex in the cemetery...I love vampire poems and this is the best damn dark yet erotic poem I have ever read....You have penned a magnificent piece of writing here, poet...
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That right there has to be one of the best vampiric poems i've ever read in my life. I found it ever so loving, exciting and very very dark. It's the perfect entry for my contest and i'd be surprised if you didn't win, personally.
It had great flow and conveyed such amazing emotion. You're an amazing writer and this is now one of my favorite poems of all time i've got to say. \
Again, Great job. I enjoyed the way you explained things. How you expressed sex so innocently. Hidden with glorious words..=]
"And with his next thrust,
Gave her...
Immortality!" That right there is the best line in the poem, i believe.
Again, Great write. I look forward to adding you as soon as the contest is over. =]]
Thank you for the entry and good luck in the contest. <333
~~IvoRy
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wow.. its beautiful.. long and beautiful this is a great write thank you fro entereing my contest
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Rather long - needs editing and checking.
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thanks for entering the contest!!!
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Read my rules properly and I will read your poem
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Oh my. This is definitely a favourite out of all of the poems on this site! Very sensual, it had me panting and my hands traveling. VERY lovely piece, this is.
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Quite a long poem you have here, and though you have stuffed it with good imagery, here and there I kind of lost interest to be honest.
Overall a good poem actually, but maybe it could be shortened a bit
Thanks for this entry as well!
Leander -
very nice....i like this piece a lot...thanks for entering and good luck in the contest
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this was really good but i was tured of that someone was dead i hink in this poem ut honestly this was CREATIVEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEee.
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Please read rules before entering
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You fully deserved the win, I thought it was very wll done. I liked the detail, and emotions behind it.
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oooh I like the vampire erotica poems,expertely written, well done, thanks for entering and good luck!
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Even though this was long it captivated my attention with vivid images and great detail. I loved the story that took place in this poem and the lines: "He whispered his greeting,
A fell voice in the air.
She opened her eyes,
Nostrils flared,
Eyes opened wider,
But no scream came,
Only submission."
Because they showed the passion between the two. Great write and best wishes
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