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Our first kiss

Our first kiss was,
  long awaited.
I captured your dreams
between
  my lips,
captured moans between
my thighs.
It was comfort.
Your eyes screamed thank you's
  to God
for granting,
what you had prayed for so long.
You finally had me.
Life paused
  momentarily.
Gave just enough time to
lock our  wishes
  together,
just enough time to hear
my angel
  whisper,
“He’s the one.”

It was home.
It was the beginning of us.

              ...................and I had already known you were the one.






Author notes

This is what my boyfriend wrote to me the first day we kissed......I thought it would be sweet to share what we both felt that day.....

Hey Beautiful,

I just came back from seeing you on lunch, and I finally got up enough courage to kiss you. I am so happy right now, you have NO idea!!!!!!!

I don’t know how to explain it, but when I kissed you there was this feeling that I got, that I have never had before, and I knew right there that I was going to spend the rest of my life with you. I could just feel that chemistry, and I know you could feel it to, I could see it in your eyes.

Even though it was so quick, it was SO AMAZING. I loved that feeling of being so close to you, and kissing you!!!!! It was so great!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Maybe you will come by tonight and we can go out, I know I am being a little over-zealous, but I cant get enough of you, I just cant.



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  • grannyeri gold member
    February 22

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    You sure have posted many poems in this reading list; that perfect kiss, as described in these lines, is certainly one that will never be forgotten. Think we all have one of those that we always remember. Easy to read and understand what you share in these lines.

  • Tender wolf gold member
    January 10

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    Now that is what I call a kiss...one that last forever...sighs...from top to bottom...Thank you kindly for sharing and entering


    • Layne..
      January 10
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      It was my pleasure, I am glad you enjoyed this, thank you
      -Love Layne
  • This is Just Beautiful

    You got talent and I can always appreciate good talent. Keep writing and I'll keep reading.


    • Layne..
      January 8
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      Oh thank you, i appreciate that, I am glad you enjoyed

  • zochit2me gold member
    November 28, 2007

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    It was home.
    It was the beginning of us.


    And I had already known you were the one.

    Great...

    (“He’s is the one.” Check-He's is.

    Becky


    • Layne..
      November 28, 2007
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      I am so pleased that you enjoyed, and thanks for pointing that out

  • Josh0517
    November 21, 2007

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    Awesome... "My eyes screamed thank you's to God." Exactly what I was thinking. I love "just enough time to hear my angel whisper, "He's the one." What a fantastic poem, GREAT JOB BABY!!

    • Layne..
      November 21, 2007
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      Thanks Love, yes the long awaited kiss, HAHA, lots of memories, but now new ones to make

  • Swangrnv
    November 21, 2007
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    this is so romantic!

    good to see you writing happy again!


  • BungeeGirl
    November 21, 2007

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    This may be the best one I've read yet....your words come together so eloquently here...and it tugs at my heart. You SO deserve the happiness you find. And it shows your strength as an artist that your works are borne out of both sadness AND happiness. Way to go, sis

    • Layne..
      November 21, 2007
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      Thanks huh, I so appreciate your commente

  • nessa1980
    November 21, 2007
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    OMG..... Breathtaking!!!! Loved it!!!

  • moluv10
    November 21, 2007
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    You must have been hit by a dozen of cupids arrows with that first kiss! Nice write!


    • Layne..
      November 21, 2007
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      thank you, i actually posted this by accident, it had to be edited first, so your comment took me by surprise, but its all set now, thank you for your comment
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