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The Climax

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Climax!

 

 

 

What a day! my work load rough

Journey home, I’ve had enough

Get undressed and in the buff

Ready for my shower

 

Standing naked in the room

Heat enfolds me like a womb

Steam escaping in a plume

Step inside my shower

 

Searing heat I’ll tolerate

First contact exhilarate

Water jets invigorate

Here inside my shower

 

First time today I feel alive

Sexual pleasure will derive

Imagination overdrive

Within my steamy shower

 

Pleasure seeking now commences

Fingers playing, body tenses

Sweet aromas fill me senses

I’m lost within my shower

 

Breathless now, passions amiss

Rubbing, probing, lost in bliss

One thing missing is a kiss

Climax in my shower

 

 

 

 

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  • laura0757 gold member
    October 28

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    I thought this to be a wonderful write...........hot...............great job...


  • The kiss is Thirst gold member
    October 27
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    A good poem, well done - good luck in the contest.


  • Poetic-Theorem silver member
    October 26

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    You do have an elegant way with words
    Very Steamy..not talking about the shower
    The rhyme scheme in addition to the repetition is brilliant
    This is not only sensual, it's quite charming as well
    This is definitely a shower and the end of a day that
    everyone should try..over and over
    Thanks so much for sharing this delightful piece
    wish you the very best of luck

    David


  • UncleDunk gold member
    October 3

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    Oh, good Lord! I've been avoiding reading anyone's Erotic Poetry since I joined AP, because, well... Just because. And Yet!!!! The first poem I ever read of yours was just that, so I thought if I was going to delve into it, might as well go to a pro (that SERIOUSLY didn't come out right, did it).

    This poem is great. My wife, when I met her, was on friendly terms with the shower.

    I laughed, I cried, and then I dried.

    Good fun.


  • Ellis gold member
    November 26, 2007
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    WOW--CITY

    Someone I know
    is aroused
    now that like so
    I've caroused
    -----------


  • DolphinLass silver member
    November 25, 2007
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    wow congrats on gold ...great write too


  • second-born
    November 25, 2007

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    This is superb…I loved its rhyming scheme and its flow…the whole poem is a delight to read…thank you for sharing your lovely poem!


  • onesugar gold member
    November 22, 2007

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    Sorry about the late read

    This is fantastic as always

    Oh the things one can do in a shower

    Good luck

    Love ~sugar~


  • arafura gold member
    November 22, 2007

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    breathless...

    Good clean fun! This is extremely hot my friend... and I don't mean the water temperature! You have such a compelling way of describing pleasure! Bravo! Good luck in the contest!


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    November 21, 2007

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    Oh my!!

    Yes, very sensual... I absolutely loved it!!

    Brilliantly written, great rhyme scheme... gosh, it's just so fab!!


  • moonbumps silver member
    November 21, 2007
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    Slippery soapy
    sliding through
    steamy suds covering
    saucy Sue....whew!


  • Haunted-Memory silver member
    November 21, 2007

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    Steamy

    Well Dear Sue you certainly showered us all with a steamy poem here. Very sensual, leaves not much to the imagination and leads a person into a sense of needing to take a shower and join in the fun of the moment. Now where is that damn fire engine you did it again and the flames need putting out and after reading this it will take more than the shower to do it lmao all my best wishes Brian.xx


  • Angelo di Luce gold member
    November 21, 2007

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    Just sensual I love the way you pressented it

    you are very erotic

    Plenty of kisses

    Nick


  • Pete Greenslade gold member
    November 21, 2007
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    wow sue hand me my angina tablets phew you saucy minx ,,excellent xxpp


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    November 21, 2007

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    Now that is a shower worth waiting for...I could just feel your words and the heat from that hot water...sighs...Thanks for sharing, do believe I will take one


  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    November 21, 2007

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    Brilliant

    Brilliant flow to this. Wonderful writing and imagery. Quite erotic too [water always is]. I like the way you have captured water and made it sensual. Brilliant writing Sue. I really liked this one.

    Wayne
    x


  • cricketjeff gold member
    November 21, 2007

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    As you wash I'd want to see you
    From your troubles want to free you
    Is the curtain very see through...
    When you're in the shower?

    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      November 21, 2007
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      My shower curtains's crystal clear
      Come on in, please do not fear
      Stand and look, but do not leer
      When you're in my bathroom

      Steam you'll find will block your view
      Of the female form of poet Sue
      It may leave you feeling blue
      Here within my bathroom

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