Ditch the ads, upload images and much more - upgrade today from 5.95/month!
Read • Contests • Groups • Learn • Forums • Store • Help
 

Christmas Eve

Missing image

Christmas Eve

O Christmas Eve is such a treat
Forget the malls and things I dread
With Candy dreams and you my sweet
The time has come to go to bed

Forget the malls and things I dread
As we lay down and close our eyes
The time has come to go to bed
Tomorrow brings a bright surprise

As we lay down and close our eyes
I reach for you and hold your hand
Tomorrow brings a bright surprise
It’s perfect now just as we planned

I reach for you and hold your hand
With Candy dreams and you my sweet
It’s perfect now just as we planned
O Christmas Eve is such a treat

 

 

 

Author notes

Pantoum:
The pantoum consists of a series of quatrains rhyming ABAB in which the second and fourth lines of a quatrain recur as the first and third lines in the succeeding quatrain; each quatrain introduces a new second rhyme as BCBC, CDCD. The first line of the series recurs as the last line of the closing quatrain, and third line of the poem recurs as the second line of the closing quatrain, rhyming ZAZA.

The design is simple:

Line 1
Line 2
Line 3
Line 4

Line 5 (repeat of line 2)
Line 6
Line 7 (repeat of line 4)
Line 8

Continue with as many stanzas as you wish, but the ending stanza then repeats the second and fourth lines of the previous stanza (as its first and third lines), and also repeats the third line of the first stanza, as its second line, and the first line of the first stanza as its fourth. So the first line of the poem is also the last.

Last stanza:

Line 2 of previous stanza
Line 3 of first stanza
Line 4 of previous stanza
Line 1 of first stanza

Art work: Home - by: winter music

In a list

Comments:

    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    • Line numbers  • Invite them to read
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments

1 - 13 of 13

  • Swan song gold member
    December 5, 2007
    Edit | Reply
    Beautiful I can see you loving Christmase poems and this is a very good one dear I loved it


  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    December 4, 2007

    Edit | Reply
    Congratulations on being a finalist in out first rhyming contest.
    We're sorry that you didn't make it into the prizes, but we hope you'll join us for our other contests.

    Thank you for your entry....Sue and Jeff


  • Luna Tique Fringe
    November 28, 2007

    Edit | Reply
    Lovely, and sweetly romantic..like you
    Beautiful presentation, too.


  • everyone1 gold member
    November 24, 2007

    Edit | Reply

    Amazing!

    I have never seen, nor have I ever heard of such a style of poem, and to have it carry such a wonderful message, and keep its' form! Wow! I would just love to be able to write like this! Astonishingly neat!

    ~ James ~


  • captain howdy
    November 24, 2007
    Edit | Reply
    a very beautiful Christmas poem!


  • Candy6
    November 23, 2007
    Edit | Reply
    Well written poem.

  • Eusebius
    November 23, 2007

    Edit | Reply

    bravo

    An absolutely wonderful and perfect Christmas poem...I love the pantuum form...excellent! bravo... bravo... bravo...


  • anaisnais
    November 23, 2007

    Edit | Reply
    Oh Amera you stun us again with the delight your pieces bring forth, and warmth of your words. Another really pretty piece.


  • Desire gold member
    November 22, 2007

    Edit | Reply

    Oh My Word!!

    Love this piece You have versed also the images brought forth
    Beautiful weaving of words (as always)
    and the border to accompany this Beauty!!
    the black background...
    LOVE IT!!!

    for keepsake
    You are so Talented!!

    Best wishes to You in all You do Sweet One
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • Ithica silver member
    November 21, 2007

    Edit | Reply
    WOW! This is really special. It is so sweet and simple in image and emotion. While the rhyme scheme has my brain twisted into fits! Impressive, I must say. (I hope you don't go throwin' this style at me too soon! It seems it should be a long way down the road...) Good luck with your entry!


  • grannyeri gold member
    November 21, 2007

    Edit | Reply
    What a wonderful presentation you have created on this page. Lovely sidebar and picture at top of the page, and another wonderful poetic form you have penned here. Easy to read and understand the sentiments you are expressing in these lines. Liked the flow, rhythm and rhyme throughout the poem.


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    November 21, 2007

    Edit | Reply
    This was just beautiful my sweet one. Thanks for sharing and the form wow. I may have to try this just becaue my angel did.
    Thanks for sharing honey
    I love you.
    Tory


  • daviscth silver member
    November 21, 2007

    Edit | Reply
    I love the poem and the picture is awesome!!!!!
    Thanks so much for explainging the type of poetry to me because I just don't know much about it. LOL
    I do know I'm so glad you posted this in my contest and I wish you all the best at judging. Cathy

1 - 13 of 13