Love me and hate me,
Just do what you wanna do!
Deceive me, then beg me,
Because you know I'll forgive you.
Yes, yes, I love you!
(If that wasn't clear)
But boy, all that you do
Is getting madness near.
Save me the trouble of getting you close;
Just come, because I know that in the end you will.
Please prove me I am the one that you chose...
Bittersweet taste of your love I need to feel!
Author notes
Nothing left to say, eh? Not one of my best, definately. But it was exactly the way I felt at the moment.
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Fantastic.
Very heartfelt.
Thanks for everything, good luck -
this was excuisite hun.. veyr good!
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hmmmmm...this poem has a pretty powerful and direct start but the second stanza somehow cuts it off with a sort of artificial simplicity in both style and vocabulary....hmmmm....I agree that these lines would fit much better in the lyrics category,maybe even on some guitar chords but I must say that all in all it lacks that balance in thoughts and structure that I was used with in your poems.
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cool
wow, i can tell that poem really came from the heart, its cool -
yeah, could be better, but i liked the "rock" attitude-- this would make a great song.
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You think so? I even thought making an electric piano melody for it! Well, it's not like I'm good at that, but anyway!
Thanks a lot!!!
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Yes yes yes!!! i know the feeling. amazing piece.
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Amazing
wow, somehow u read me. its like i dont need to think cause u wrote it all down...how cool is that..i can die my thoughts without having to worry about not been able to see where im at, cuz u tell me all its amazing how u use your words. one of the things im stiving to do...my new rolemodel? haha!
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Aw, you're too sweet! I suppose we feel the same way, then. Because I'm very confused 'bout this love thing :|
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Raw emotions are penned here sis!
Can say I'm been there though.
Boys can be jerks and the only Oneyou can really depend on is Christ
even when it's hard sometimes.
Love ya sis and great write!
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