As the water falls, he stops.
His eyes become closer to mine.
Fifteen feet away
And yet, wrapped in his arms
All alone but with him,
People pulling me away.
Him pulling me closer with his eyes,
Painful emotions surround me.
He does not know the pain he causes
Or maybe he does.
Will it end,
Will I see his love?
He says he knows my hurt.
He says he feels my pain.
So why has it not stopped
Will it ever change?
The rain begins to hurt,
I begin to fall.
His eyes look away,
His arms have gone.
A contest entry
- Invite Only; Me on Their List by Ted E Bare.
300 points, ended January 3, 2008, 79 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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Reread this one again. I can tell someone hurt you in a major way. All I know is that he lost for you are a major catch!
Ted E -
I can feel your pain more ways than one. I know it can hurt when the one you love doesn't respond in kind. I truly hope your pain can be washed away by the rain and not be caused by the rain. Things change even though it's hard for people to do so. I do wish your heart well and be blessed by a love so beautiful that you get lost in it. I want to thank you for entering my "Invite Only; Me On Their List" contest.
Ted E
PS: Once I have commented on all of your entries, then I will reread them all and choose the one that will be brought forward for being selected as Gold, Silver, Bronze or HM.
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