Forget the distance between us
Because we have a never ending existence between us
Tell me how you feel with no hesitation
Tell me how you want it to be with elaboration
We will be together forever and a day
You, I will never let go or toss away
I simply love you and want you to be my wife
Because you are the quality of my life
Every night I dream
I dream of me being your Queen
I have your name written in my heart
In every piece and every part
I'm giving you my all because I feel you deserve it
So don't turn this around on me and hurt it
There was a time or two
when i doubted you
But in the end I still chose you
To have you as my friend I'm thankful
To have you as my girl i'm grateful
I love everything about you
From your hypnotizing smile
To your unique style
From your sweet taste
To your heart beating pace
Please don't be too blind to see
That without you, there is no me
A contest entry
- 6 OPTIONS...I HOPE YOU WILL LOVE IT, PREWRITES ARE ALLOWED by Romily.
380 points, ended November 27, 2007, 20 entries
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wow, *wipe away tears* this is exactly how i feel about a speacail some one. Great write you rock thanks. -
This is truly a very beautifully-written and imagery-riched poem you got here. I think it is very sweet and loving. Thank you for sharing this poem with me and all of AP, and good luck to you in the contest. I hope you win or place atleast. This poem truly deserves it. May God bless you with every step in life's journey you take. Keep up the excellent work.
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good write keep writing
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I simiply love you and want you to be my wife
Because you are the quality of my life
Everynight I dream
I dream of me being your Queen....isn't here something confusing?you want some one to be your wife and at the same time you want to be his/her wife?
sorry if i amm too rude but there are a lots of spelling errors such as,simiply,Im(no apostrophe),you made i which should be I,gratful etc..
apart from all these I really do love your piece, and I am eagerly waiting for you to come back with a bit more serious, honey. you have the power.just show me your fire. -
Great expression of love
Have you considered a slight restating of the last line ending with "we"?
That still rhymes and seems so much more healthy. But as it is, it expresses quite an attachment.
Tecphe
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Very lovely piece you have here....I liked it.
ephiphany
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how sweet and the vocabulary is nice it put a good twist on all of it keep it up youbg one
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