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Gods Rainbow

The deepest crevaces of my mind

shelter horrific memories past

tulmultuous storm out of control

my idea of self worth fading fast

 

Morning came yet the sun didn't shine

lingering shadow engulfing me

it took quite some time to realize

that I was blind and refused to see

 

The boat did rock in the rivers deep

tossed about aimlessly in the night

I called out to my Lord God above

please rescue me from this fateful plight


He planted my feet on solid ground

then pulled those angry thorns from my side

it soon became to me crystal clear

in my creator I could confide

 


Together we have trod the mountain

I stood in awe of ivory glow

looking through the mist of yesterday

I saw the Glory of God's rainbow.



 

Author notes

Prompt: Turn your dark clouds into a background for God's rainbow.

Words used: deepest, shelter, storm, morning, sun, shine, shadow, boat, deep, night, solid, thorns, crystal, mountain, mist

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  • Legend silver member
    September 20, 2008
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    Congratulations on a richly deserve Gold award


  • Paloszoo gold member
    September 16, 2008

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    This is so beautiful and uplifting. Your words just flow so smoothly from your pen. I've written a few like this, so I can relate well to these thoughts and emotions. I appreciate every line! Good luck in the contest!


  • Legend silver member
    September 16, 2008

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    A beautiful structured piece Not religious myself I still find beauty in your words and the clear comfort you receive from your beliefs Great work good luck in the contest


  • Freed by Mercy silver member
    September 15, 2008

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    Wonderful poem full of powerful metaphors. I'm shocked it didn't place in the original contest since it is a perfect take on the prompt. Well done, poet!


  • Nicada silver member
    September 15, 2008

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    This is very beautiful and quite inspiring! I enjoyed the spiritual message here very much. I wish you all the best in the contest. Blessings, Patty


  • Samplette gold member
    September 15, 2008
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    Full of inspiration! I have removed several from the contest alread. The reason I don't allow prewrites normally...entering anything, and not reading rules.
    Thanks for this. You have it in a contest that has ended and didn't place, so this is accepted.
    Sam


  • Elvenfairy
    November 29, 2007

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    this was a great poem. You did such a good job showing how God can turn darkness and depression into something beautiful.


  • The-Human-Stain
    November 24, 2007
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    very nice thank you

  • Figaro
    November 24, 2007
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    Love those mountaintop experiences with the Lord. I loved this.


  • Frozentearz
    November 22, 2007

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    Beautiful beautiful beautiful as the words flow,
    there is nothing unique in what you write about,
    just true beauty.
    Love and Light
    Frozentearz


  • Jadon
    November 21, 2007
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    Light shines!

    Quite an impact as I read this write. Your muse has returned as strong or stronger than before.
    That line "Morning came yet the sun didn't shine" really caught hold on my attention. A morning without the sun shining? somewhere? But then, "I was blind and refused to see".
    Not your intent I am sure but I thought again of Noah's Ark as I read of the 'rocking boat'. Perhaps the rainbow association!
    Always admire how you share your faith in verse. Jadon


    • Frogzter gold member
      November 21, 2007

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      Ah my friend... here you are again! You always bring something to me in your personal comments that I had not even realized myself until the time in which I read your thoughts on it! Thank you!

      Blessings,

      Frogz~


      • Jadon
        November 21, 2007

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        I think you refer to the "Ark" and I meant to say that even if it were not intentional (never know with you) that it works well in the "salvation' theme as the Ark was the means of saving all those aboard.


  • daviscth silver member
    November 21, 2007

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    This is a beautifully worded inspiration to all of us. What a joy it was to read. I wish you all the best in the contest.


  • wildfiredreamer
    November 20, 2007

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    lovely lovely lovely
    will we ever learn to turn to God first, instead of letting things get us down.
    Keep penning for the Lord.


  • Quiet places
    November 20, 2007

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    Awesome poem!!

    Frogz!! You really kicked up your heels on this one my dear!! This is a splendid poem!! Great stuff! Always great stuff when our Lord is within it!! Love the manner in which you painted this unique pic of the moment! Excellent imagery to accent the image of a rainbow! Love it, Don


    • Frogzter gold member
      November 21, 2007
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      Thanks so much Don! I am glad you enjoyed this. Hope you have a fantastic Thanksgiving surrounded by family and friends!

      Blessings,

      Frogz~

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