You dazzle and delight me
ignite and excite
alone and unadorned
I toss flower petals
in your path
Everyday a new adventure
all of them just linger
but for you, my life would empty
I'm your stage, now make your entry
Dazzle-delight, with your sensations
rock my world like only you can
inside my mind you stand as shroud
I'm loving you, silently, and out loud
Revisit past escapades
and far-flectched harmonies
let's take this farther
to heightened upscale degrees
I need you like a petal needs the water
you warm me up till I'm only hotter
in dazzle-down town I seek your presence
just to sniff of your profound essence.
Needing more of you, is now the norm
convince me of your will to stay
for I'll have it none other way
now a kiss...just one a day!
Author notes
Loving from a distance...smile
A contest entry
- Calling ALL Hopeless Romantics Come on in and show me what you've got! by PureRomance.
525 points, ended November 23, 2007, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Superb entry with the first two lines! Recipient would be most flattered, I'm sure! Line 12, are you using "shroud" as in a cloth to wrap a corpse, or in some other sense? Line 15, possible typo with "flectched"? Sounds like a relationship that has a history, with "revisit past escapades". Might read more smoothly with a consistent rhyme and meter. Just one kiss a day! What a marvel of self-control!
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oh yeah!!! you dazzle and delight all your readers with this sweet, funny and 'hopelessly'romantic poem of yours...I liked this line so much..."I'm loving you, silently, and out loud..." hehehe...'true love' hits you...
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Hahahaha I am kind of corny, aren't I? hahahaa yes, forever the love marn-whatever that is hahaha Thanks...
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Very romantic, and very confident in the feelings that this poem shows.
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I try, sometimes to feigned regret ahhahaha thanks for this comment, I appreciate
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Ok, Ok..Enough is enough
They need to start splitting these contests up into male/female categories, especially when writing of love, passion and such. How am I supposed to compete with a poem so beautifully penned by a lady that makes me pant and drool! (that didnt sound good...the Poem I meant) And Im sure the judge did also. Enough is enough! From now on winners in both categories, one male gold etc, one female, etc.
JK Pat..lol..yet another wonderful write with an everso subtle bit of tasteful DP that hits home here. Beautifully done. So what's us single guys sposed to do now! ARGHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!
Best wishes as always in the contest..
(it's still not fair!)
Your humble student, PP,
Evan
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wow, this is one of the most complimentary reviews I have ever gotten, thank you so much, kind Sir
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This is a very sweet and passionate poem. It flowed wonderfully and fit together great. You did a wonderful job with this. Please if you will add me as a fav so that I may be graced with the ability to read more from you as this contest goes on. I will in return do the same. Good luck to you in this contest.
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Wow, thanks for such lovely commentsSure we can be fav(s) of each other, my pleasure
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