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Today

Late afternoons
As shadows quicken
I become immersed in reverie
To meditate where dust motes thicken
Contemplating memories in the slanting light

Of day's dying sun

Flickering
In bits and pieces
Events orbit where the dust motes spin
Some are welcomed
Some despaired of
Some too painful to be let in

Evenings lying in my bed
The day’s events traverse my head
Filled with longings
Fretting displaced care
I wrestle ghosts not really there

Sometimes in dreams
I'll battle evil monsters
Or I’m a sorceress unraveling cryptic codes
I remember once standing amid mocking laughter
Stark naked where the bus unloads

Early mornings

I Slowly wake up
Not quite back on earth until my second cup

Moving like a garden slug sitting in the new day's sun
Savouring coffee from my favourite mug

 

The first day of the rest of my life 

Has just begun ...

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  • secberm
    January 12, 2008
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    This is a wonderful piece my friend.

    The first day of the rest of my life
    Has just begun ...

    Excellent ending. Enjoyed the internal/off rhymes and flow. Enjoyed the read alone more. The photo's fitting/perfect. Missed reading you.

    DEZ


  • SeptemberFaith
    December 23, 2007
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    This is one of the most beautiful poems I have read in a long time. This is exactly what I was looking for, thought provoking and beautiful.

    This is touching and something that most anyone who has had that defining day can relate to. I love your word usage.

    Great work!

    Criss


    • malkinpuss
      December 24, 2007
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      SeptemberFaith

      Thank you so much for your kind words. It thrills my heart that you felt inspired to write such a touching and inspiring comment!


  • Emile
    November 20, 2007

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    Very good

    The poem flows with a realistic beat and the words say everything by evoking thoughts within the reader's consciousness. Your words paint the scene with descriptive words that bring the essence of your experience into our conscious mind and we can feel what you feel. The descriptive wording and the great imagery bring this piece to life. You have managed to capture human reactions and emotions and weave them into a poem that is easy to relate to and understand.


    • malkinpuss
      November 20, 2007
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      Emile

      Thank you for your kind words...and for reading my work!

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