To those who dwell in other worlds
The veil is lifting from my door
If I pray, and I have prayed;
To have life's love and stay
Til now I missed the hanging sign
Which now swings there before me
And if I have, I have been blind;
To join you there and cross the line
I feel your pull in every bone;
This new home that's yet unknown
And if I fail, and I have failed
To leave the body's guiding rails
But the leaving is the least of it
A squatter's right's to stay in life
But if I won't, and I won't go
I'll stay enlightened by your glow
To walk this line of life and death
To see beyond the veil
If I still feel, I feel bound in
Supporting warmth in every limb
No, I shall remain; not enter there
Held in family's love re-sown
And if I'm fed, I'm fed with love
Blind to sins I'm guilty of
To those who dwell in other worlds
I thank your for old life renewed
So if I live, and I shall live
I'll hold you in my love to give
Author notes
The threshold of life and death...
I believe that sometimes when a door opens, it can seem alluring to leave, especially in a painful situation, but on glancing back we may find renewed strength and vitality in the life we knew simply in the perspective we found. This perspective can lead to not only renewed belief but also more love to give.
A contest entry
- Strong Souls by infinite spirit.
450 points, ended December 8, 2007, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Escape From The Afterlife! by brightXdarkness.
600 points, ended June 20, 2008, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This is very interesting. How being alive makes us so ignorant to sins we have commited. They may not have any consequences here, but in the afterlife, they could have very big consequences. And love. It's so strong here, but in the afterlife? I hope that there still is love... but then again, I wouldn't know. Good take on the prompt! Thank you for entering my contest, and best of luck!!
Alex -
Very good. Although it wasn't written specifically for the contest, I like how it relates. I love your perspective on the afterlife and how a new perspective on an old situation can lead to, as you say, renewed life. I think the poem works better outside of the contest, but either way, it is still a very good write. Keep up the good work
Sincerely,
ModernXTimes -
Excellent write! I like the structure and rhyme schemes very much. I think that we think alike in poetry, though I've been trying some alternative (for me) approaches of late. You nailed the rhythm and structure as well as the message. Well done.
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This blew me away. I love it.
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Thank you so much!
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