Tell me what to do
What to say and how to feel
Tell me when i'm dreaming
Tell me when it's real
Tell me what to wear
Tell me what to say
Tell me when to leave
Tell me when to stay
Be my mind
So that i may not think
Help to do what's right
Be my missing link
Choices make or break
Life as we know it
And with my luck
I'm going to blow it
So tell me what to do
What to say and how to feel
So that my failure is just a dream
And my happiness is real
A contest entry
- November New Member Contest by AP Greeters.
600 points, ended December 7, 2007, 83 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please dont use big words, i'm not as smart as i'd like to be.
Comments
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Thanks for entering
I pick up that you want someone to make your choices for you. I guess that is a choice in its own right. It is nicely written and makes me sad. You should feel secure enough to make your own choice without that someone telling you what to do, although I truly do understand this.
Good luck - let the ink flow and your fingers dance
Rosemary -
Welcome to AllPoetry
G'Day perfect-imperfection
♥
"Choices make or break
Life as we know it
And with my luck
I'm going to blow it"
Very interesting and strong stanza you have penned here. That and the final 2 lines are fierce and stick in my mind reading this.
Good write.
Thank you for your entry
Best of luck
Stay safe
~AJ
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Welcome to All Poetry
Nice tto see another Aussie join the site
A write that so many of us can relate to! If only others could make our choices for us! But then who knows if they would make choices that are right for us personally! You have poenned a very thought provoking piece. Thanks so much for entering our contest
Gaylene Oi! Oi! Oi!
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