that I might wish upon the
stars within your eyes.
Lie with me tonight;
that I might wish upon the
stars within your eyes.
that I might wish upon the
stars within your eyes.
Author notes
contest:Something Different (option 3)
Contest: Let me occupy your mind (Bright eyes)(ebpoetry)
Come On In - Nothing to be Ashamed Of - ♥ LOVE ♥
Contest: Romance (Tarja) Option 5: Stargazing
Contest AP Family by Theory of the Lost-Grampa #3 =Lost in your eyes
In a list
A contest entry
- Haiku-Me.....Me Haiku by UnchartedPoet.
1100 points, ended November 23, 2007, 23 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Such beauty in your glance (Options contest!) by ButterflyforChrist.
500 points, ended November 26, 2007, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Anything and everything! by My Selfish Romance.
300 points, ended January 26, 2008, 97 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Prewrites Mania by Celticmoon.
450 points, ended March 30, 2008, 84 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Adorable
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ooh this is just beautiful! simple and to the point! i wish my boyfriend say things like this to me! i think i'll have a little talk with him! congrats on all the trophies!
~NineTailedFox
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Sorry, had to chuckle when your message came through. thanks for the wonderful comment left again with this work,
Evan
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woman love to be told these beautiful words
see i told you your so romantic
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I like this, it's simple but says all it needs to. So many pieces now days get lost in complicated metaphors that they lose sight of what they're trying to say in the effort to say it perfectly. This is something different, thank you
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Thank you for yet another visit to one of my works, my you have been busy..and thank you also for the lovely comment left upon this page,
Evan
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This one has quite a Senryu feel to it actually. Haiku is more nature related and Senryu has exact the same format of haiku (I guess) but then it involves emotions
You definately managed to express a lot of emotions within just a few lines with this well done!
Thank you for another entry in this contest!
Leander -
Lie with me tonight;
that I might wish upon the
stars within your eyes.
Thank you for entering my ku contest. This is very well written and it seems to come directly from the heart. -
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Thanks for the nice comment on this work,
Evan
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Don't need to say much here! Except Outstanding work, here...
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Thanks so much for stopping in and for the nice comment,
Evan
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A beautiful work of art.
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Thank you Jan for visiting this work and for the nice comment left here,
eb
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Wow
This is beautiful and her eyes are stunning. What a great picture and the poem is so well expressed with so very few words. Thank you for sharing with me.
Blessings,
Kelle Marie,
stavykm
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Well, Kelle is bac. thanks once again for visiting one of my works and for another wonderful comment you left with it. Your visits and comments are always appreciated,
(So romantic isn't it?)
Evan
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I enjoy haiku and this is a clever piece that hints at supressed passion and joys yet to come.
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Thank you so much for visiting as I always love to see new faces and thanks for the nice comment also,
Evan
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short and sweet....great poem
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Thanks for stopping in and visiting this work. My first attempt at a Haiku for a contest that didnt turnout too bad..
Thx again,
Evan
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to be with someone, lying under the night sky, seems so wonderful.
wish I had someone to do that with...
nice piece
good luck!!
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Thank you for visiting one of my works and for the kind comments you left for this and the wishes left with it,
Evan
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Congrats on the honorable mentions. However I'm really not a fan of haiku's but this was beautiful. Thanks for entering and good luck. (Nice choice on the picture too.)
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Thanks for you visit and kind comments. was a bi hard to pick what prewrites to enter and that a younger lady might like and this was the most logical choice I guess,
Thx again,
Evan
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So few words and yet they steal ones breath away! You have taken an age old saying and given it a brand new set of wings! Remarkable piece!
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So few words
Thank you so much for your visit and your kind comments, both of which are truly appreciated,
Evan
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To wish upon the star in a lovers eyes, there is no better feeling... I hope you don't mind if I add you and this piece to my favourites.... just beautiful
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To wish upon the star
That would be the deepest of compliments you could give..add away and thank you once again,
Evan
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This is really beautiful! Thank you so much for entering. It's a very lovely piece.
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This is really beautiful!
Thank you so much for stopping in and the lovely comment given this work,
Evan
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This is beautiful Great write I love stars i see with in your eyes thats neat.
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Thx Cara
Ain't I just the most romantic man you've ever met? Lol... I thank you for your visit once again and also for the kindes of comments,
Best Wishes,
Evan
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AWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW! how wonderfuly sweet. What a simple little read but I love it!
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AWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW
And just as sweet as this comment.....thx for stopping in again for a visit..I appreciate it as well as your nice comments
Evan
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Elegance personified...remarkable, the impact that can be garnered from so few words...thanks for sharing
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Elegance personified
Thx Pat for the visit and the very nice comment which I value greatly,
Your humble student, oh Priestess,
Evan
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Great Haiku, got a good flow going with in ti good luck in the contest!
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Great Haiku
Thx for stopping and the nice comment left for this,
Evan
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Wishing upon the stars in your eyes...how sweetly romantic and dreamy! Sigh...that is so simple yet says so much. Wonderful!
Blessings~
Az
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Wishing upon the stars in your eyes
Thanks so much Az. Your visits and comments always mean so much and this is no different,
Thx for stopping,
Evan
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Perfection
Sometimes a few words say all we feel so much better.
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Perfection
Thx for stopping and the nice commment....yes sometinmes so few words can make one feel so good..as in "Perfection"
Evan
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Short but sweet
thats how i sum up this poem i like it
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Short but sweet
Kinda like you I imagine, thx Katy for stopping by and for the sweet comment,
Evan
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OK well this is one of the best haiku I have read today... and believe me I have read a lot, I love the dreamyness of this piece, soft and so well written, I hope to see this on the podium at the end
Karen
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OK well this is one of the best
What a wonderful comment...thank you so much as that means a lot to me...have never done this short stuff before and hearing that made my day. Thank you so much,
Evan
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wow, this is just amazing.full of tenderness, romance and imagery and in only 14 words.
very well done. best of luck to you in this contest, be well and be blessed
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wow, this is just amazing
Thank you for such a wonderful comment. Never tried any haiku before...beats my poems that usually run 70 lines or more..lol
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You're most welcome. I'd keep at them, if I were you
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Beautifully simple indeed Thanks for entering my contest
Jen
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thx
thx for doing that and for the nice comment
Evan
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