The sky turns black with water-laden clouds
The heavens begin to cry in despair
Night engulfs us as lightning cracks across the sky
And yet we stay out just a moment longer
The rain beats against our skin in a steady rhythm
As our gazes lock, forever stuck in time
Reluctant fingers continue to hold
As desperate lips meet in a final goodbye
A car horn sounds
The cab won’t wait
A glance behind before eyes meet again
Once more lips meet
Fingers touch
Hands caress
Time is gone
For now
We whisper promises of love and hope
Knowing much time will pass until we meet again
All we have are memories of joy and laughter
The only things keeping the smiles on our faces
Slowly our hands part
And our bodies separate
As the rain pours harder
To hide our tears
We wave goodbye as the doors close on our paradise
Then you drive away, your eyes not leaving mine
I stay on the curb as you move out of sight
Then I stay a little longer
My hand still reaching out to you
Author notes
This is a poem recently written (as of last night) that best fits the topic of Bittersweet, though its more like love trying to withstand the boundaries of distance. So I chose to give a poem that was not on the exact topic, but runs along those lines in a sense.
It's also about losing my best friend who happens to be my love. Crazy isnt it?
A contest entry
- Bittersweet by aligurl.
300 points, ended December 3, 2007, 20 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Bittersweet by Emmyb.
730 points, ended March 22, 34 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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this is an excellent write
thanks for entering it x
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Beautiful, sweet, sad.
Good work!
Love it!
Moon
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absolutely beautiful! it was bittersweet and not too much of either. a moment in time captured very well.i could feel the rain. i especialy like how its sweet, but sad becuase while the love never stops, time has taken them apart. great job.
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I know all to well of the boundaries of distance i met the love of my life here on AP eight months ago.She from Tennessee I from Vancouver British Columbia Canada. Bittersweet Ya ! We long to hold each other, every day we speak of our love we know the most inner secrets of each other yet we have not met face to face Love Hurts ! So Good !
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this poem touched my heart... that moment is going to happen to me in a few weeks. im dreading it.
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You can tell that poem came straight fomr the heart...well done
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Very well written poem - it came through with such a strong heart wrenching image - no wonder it won a silver
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Very good
Your feelings come out strong and real, imparting your poem with depth and believability.You managed to nicely capture the suffrage of young passionate love in this poem, creating the ambiance of the moment well. Life is a series of choices, as we navigate rough waters in search of love’s safe harbor within fleeting moments of time.
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Actually it runs perfectly with numbers one and 2. And whe I said goodbye to him, the only difference was, it wasn't raining. Thank you for entering. it made me cry because I know how it feels. Kudos.
"I stay on the curb as you move out of sight
Then I stay a little longer
My hand still reaching out to you"
LOVED IT!!
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