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Diamond Tears

A deafening shine
Echoed in each drop;
They carry with them brilliant whispers
Of the day's harsh events...
And bring a sense of forgiving relief.

A contest entry

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  • amaranthine lover gold member
    December 6, 2007

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    I like the tender touch of this, but I do feel that you should add a few more images to make it really impact the reader.


  • Soft rayne
    December 1, 2007

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    ooooooo i like this!! i like the first hree lines, but i think some mre imagery in th last two would strengthen this piece.


  • HeavenScent4U
    November 20, 2007

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    a provocative first line, like the use of deafening. very nice take on this prompt. best of luck to you in this contest, be well and be blessed

  • Seeking Peace silver member
    November 19, 2007

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    This is a lovely piece and quite a different take on the prompt, well done on a well rounded piece and goodluck in the contest

    Karen


  • SmokinHotWhiteTiger
    November 19, 2007

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    Short n Sweet!

    Very nicely done here. I like tyour flow the structure everything about it. its just a very well written done poem for this contest. anyways I enjoyed reading this poem and keep it up Good Luck in the contest

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