All the tears flowing, but not from my eyes
But spilling out from my heart
As I stare at the cloudy skies
And the world watches me fall apart
Your love you have taken away
I break down slowly inside
I wont tell you what I want to say
But its becoming more difficult to hide
It seems as if it's falling apart
No matter what I try to do
You cant give me your heart
Cause it never belonged to you
She holds it in her hands so tight
And you wouldn't have it any other way
But though I know this I just might
Not want her there even when I don't say
I want you to be happy and satisfied
Not hurt and broken like me
I want to be someone in who you can confide
Regardless of the pain it causes you see
You Brought a light into my life of dark dreams
Captured by the love you claim to hold
But no matter my heart still spills these streams
And no matter the dam I build it cant be controlled
For my love of you it over flows
Knowing you will never be mine
This is something everyone knows
But I guess if you are happy thats fine
I don't want to be a bother to you
And I know you will say you love me
Believe me when I say I love you too
But is there something else I'm supposed to see?
I don't know if you really would stay
If perhaps you didn't love her
Or would you walk away
As if I never were
In my dark dreams I see your back
But I see the one I know you love too
Is there something she has I lack
Or am I just a fool.
My love for you comes from my heart
Though my true feelings I then denied
I loved you from the very start
So truthfully I'm sorry I lied
I don't want to hurt the one I love most
And I know it will happen anyway
But your love for her you boast
So I'm sorry. what else can I say?
Author notes
~N i g h t M i s t t r e s s 1~
Option: 1
Well I just came up with it but I was thinking about this situation I have been trying to deal with and well this is sorta just what came of it.
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amazing stuff
I hate it when you love someone so much and you know that your love for them over powers what they feel about you. then it might as well be a one sided relationship. Nobody deserves to go through this kind of pain, but sometimes we have to go through it all to learn. Thank you for this piece of poetry, this was utterly beautiful.
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Holy crap! This poem is absolutely amazing! Each line is seems that you are describing everything I am going through. Ver, very well written. This is definitly going into the finalist list.
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THANK YOU :D
So very much, I am happy you really enjoyed my poem. I think that is the best compliment I have gotten on this poem. Thanks for the positive feedback. Though I am sorry to hear you are going through what I did. I hope all gets better for you. Best of luck.
*~*Night Mistress 1*~*
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very good. not quite what i waz looking for but very good.
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This is so sad but true.
I feel this way a lot.
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This is amazed me...it's written from a different point of view than most of the other poems entered in my contest.
This was one fantastic poem - your words capture every inch of hurt the person is feeling and it puts across to the reader just how hurt this person is.
I love the lines:
"I don't want to be a bother to you
And I know you will say you love me
Believe me when I say I love you too"
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"Is there something she has I lack
Or am I just a fool." - that is something we all wonder I think
Thank you for entering such a brilliant write and good luck.
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Staying with someone because you do not want to hurt them is a bad thing, even thoguh we all do it. Great poem
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This is deliciously tragic.
Emotion here is strong and vivid, emphasized(sp?) by the excelent word choice.
Ive only read three of your peices, but all of them have such strong imagery and wording
You have quite a gift!
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While I can't relate to this piece, I can understand it. It is very well written, and I have seen things like that happen. You expressed yourself very well.
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This is great. I can relate! You did a great job of conveying the emotion, and the situation at once. Beautifully Horrific I like to say
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Amazing!
I totally understand what you are going through. I've written a couple of poems concerning my best friend whom I feel in love with but he is torn between me and his ex. I absolutely love how you wrote exactly how I have been feeling for the past 8 months.
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