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Weeping Shadows Linger Silently

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In a world where you and I, ponder upon the whys
emotions boil to bubbles of tiny replies
once upon a time, forever ends with long goodbyes
where needle pointed eyes, seek no other compromise

A queen's tongue tangles, but still she seems to improvise
acid teardrops tap below, angel's suicide skies
where poets inscribe metaphors of Jekyll and Hyde
beating breaths of serpents, spewing baptized alibis

Taste a tainted tear, where true hearts die of lullabies
in places of earth's elements, grasp poetic sighs

whispering winds soar through, as my broken heartstring cries

against my will I'm here, but living is my demise

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  • Sanguinarius
    May 1, 2008

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    This Sir, is amazing . Seems to have been written with a haunted pen, "acid teardrops tap below, angel's suicide skies" I cant seem to get this line out of my head. Keep it up. ~Bret~


  • myrataal silver member
    April 24, 2008

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    A poem filled with angst ...

    and remorse ...

    Inside emotions and in hearts we search for eternal love ... and often we are shocked into reality ...

    But: forever is a Home, and it is eternally beautiful ...

    Love
    Myra


  • oldphotosonlybringt
    February 20, 2008
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    Yet another great write
    it was deep i like that
    love bunches,xoxox


  • penman gold member
    December 12, 2007
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    Excellent

    Very deep and powerful. Such an incredible write.


  • Arizona Sunset
    December 5, 2007

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    Turn from the darkest times and in this seek truth in the light...I am feeling this poem so much today. Trying to find some light. ~blessings always~ Trisha


  • eyesofanangel524
    December 4, 2007
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    This is exquisite. I sat in awe of every emotion that flooded the page. Your pen the artists brush, the paper your canvas. You reached in and touched the soul. Funny how broken hearts can be universally the same. Wonderful write, tantalizing read. Thank you for sharing and visiting my page...for if you hadn't I would have not found you.


  • CherylAnn
    December 2, 2007

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    So much pain floods this magnificant piece of beauty...standing is shadows peeking into my life is how I feel with the writes I have read...You touch on so many emotions in my heart right now and the hour of truth always comes when we least expect it...The long empty road waits for us one at a time...Yet looks like many have ventured there...Hate that you had to venture there sweetie...
    gently breathing I say Blessings to you sweet Timothy
    ~Cheryl~


  • tara wilson gold member
    November 24, 2007

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    This is painful penning for sure, very sad and honest emotion and feelings, ah, yes, long goodbyes are so much much better than short, small replies and off we go..the title is really good, I can relate to this - so many times we ask ourselves why.

  • Omegalulz
    November 22, 2007

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    I shedded a teardrop.. Very nice use of words. I only wish I could be as skilled as you.

    Omega


  • aura
    November 22, 2007
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    very smooth rhymes


  • poet2angels gold member
    November 22, 2007

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    Bro you know how to reach in and touch the heart so that one knows the pain in each word...
    SO emotional and beautifully done


    Sis Lynda


  • Stardust-luvr
    November 21, 2007

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    My dearest friend and bro your words touch my heart to tears for I have had to sadly deal with salty tears and unwanted good-byes. You have my love, support and soul enveloped in your heart and shall be by your side inspirationally in the reach to the light. many loving blessings always xxx


  • maryannde gold member
    November 21, 2007

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    Wow...very heart wrenching my friend. Some beautiful lines in this but the overall pain makes it a hard poem to read. The very last line is most poignant.

    I'd like to pretend this is just poetry...but know you well enough to know there is too much truth in this.

    I pray you will look past the darkness and remember the light.

    Hugs to you my friend...
    Mary Ann


  • Ithica silver member
    November 20, 2007

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    This is wonderful! It is utterly captivating in it visual qualities! And your words are truly poetic! I am lagging in my reading, I have to get back to your page. Thanks for the great write!


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    November 20, 2007

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    Such a since of sadness flowing from your pen...emotions boil to bubbles...acid tear drops...angels suicide skies..taste a tainted tear...broken heartstrings cries...against my will I'm here but living is my demise...sighs...This is wonderful!...Thank you my Pet Four Hawks for sharing your words with mepurrrrrrrrrrrrrrrs to my pet!


  • Layne
    November 20, 2007

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    WOW, you always impress me, this was amazing, I LOVE the rhyme---"where poets inscribe metaphors of Jekyll and Hyde beating breaths of serpents, spewing baptized alibis"- this was such a powerful line- this was an incredible heartfelt write


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    November 20, 2007

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    this is a powerful and emotional write which really draws the reader in to feel every word typed. well done and keep penning


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    November 20, 2007

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    Oh my this is so poignantly written. Your images and metaphors in this a quite stunning. It is indeed an amazing and wonderfully crafted piece.Your talent shines through with this. I love it!
    Gaylene


  • Rose Angel gold member
    November 19, 2007

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    A subtle mood, of "broken heart strings" is the thread through this poem of a broken heart"once upon a time, forever ends with long goodbyes,where needle pointed eyes, seek no other compromise" Ah,Tim. sorry that it wasn't forever...A Beautiful write from the broken hearted poet.Beautiful imagery,words...absolutely awesome that only a poet going through this trial could write...Exceptional write


  • Asdzaa Nadleehe
    November 19, 2007

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    Delicately you pen a masterpiece..
    I adore these words
    Such heartfelt emotion...
    Sweet musics pain and sorrow so perfectly you have weaved them together....
    I adore this line"where poets inscribe metaphors of Jekyll and Hyde" So very true....smiles
    Peace and many blessings
    Sister ~A~


  • misticmoonlite gold member
    November 19, 2007

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    Hello Timothy,you really delved into this piece with such depth, thoughts of what I think have me thinking,lol
    sad but very well thought out, good luck and thank you for sharing...
    Linda


  • Katie Lazette
    November 19, 2007
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    Very Well Penned

    Your words say so many things. I really like the last stanza. The last two lines are beauty.


  • 245Trioxin
    November 19, 2007

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    You know me, I never try to interpret anothers poetry, just write what makes me think of things.

    "forever ends with long goodbyes" the only times goodbyes weren't forever were the once upon a times I thought I was living.

    That's what stands out the most. Anyone that's had those goodbyes, the "you hang up firsts" and so forth...understand, truly understands the meaning of "Pang".


  • Jalalbad gold member
    November 19, 2007

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    My God this is pure poetry!The most beautiful piece I have read here.


  • Lady Ireland gold member
    November 19, 2007

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    Hi,
    This was sad but beautiful also, The middle verse was great,
    i like how you described the angels.
    I never really thought it about it before, but your depiction of a poet is so true. we can be Jekyll and hyde.
    We write with our mood don't we.
    This was a great poem thanks for sharing.
    Slán
    Dolores xx

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