Faint words hit the frigid night air
And shatters the hope of nearby soldiers
Fire fills the night sky
As the attackers
Bomb the town to shreds
Slowly, the town falls
Each wall gives in
Falling onto
Filthy canines
Shattering every last bone
Blood seeping out of the town
Displaying the horrible deaths
Parents grab their children
So they do not run into the scorching flames
But a blast kills them all
Soldiers’ limp bodies randomly lay throughout the town
The one survivor watches
From an overlooking cliff
The town be diminished forever
All that was there, is gone
Death is this town
Slowly, the man steps backward
And jolts forward
Running off the cliff
Falling into the angry ocean
Hitting his head
On the boulder
Where he had watched his live pass by
The night before
A contest entry
- Pick Your Title by Miyuki.
900 points, ended December 12, 2007, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I sure do
Your poem tells such a sad story. It's theme is the perennial one....war and it's devastaing effects on man and our world.
As I read through your poem it seemed to me that there was a plethora of falling! Falling bombs, falling buildings, dogs falling in death, falling fragments of adults and their children as the blast catches them, fallen soldiers scattered everywhere,a fallen town!!!
Then the climax as you tell of the lone man throwing himself from the cliff and falling falling down to his death in the sea.
So much falling and a wonderful stark story.
I hope you do well in the contest Midgetbridgey
korculablue
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thanks for the great comment! i actually did not think of it in that way at first =)
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