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I thought of you today Mom

I thought of you today mom.

Thought of the day
you quietly escaped and snuck
out of your skin
as we slept.
Your image flashed bolts of
unforgettable beauty and blocked
my vision.
My heart broke all over again,
like a million solid bricks tumbling down
and weighing on my blank stares.
My thoughts got lost in the blue sparkle
that your eyes used to offer.
My tears melted in the creases of your puckered lips
as I imagined your smile blinding my sadness.
I've memorized and rehearshed each face you made
so I could perform them too.
Just to hear people say,
“Oh, you look just like your mother.”
I dreamed up your voice and it sounded like
a symphony of healing that I begged to stay
and orchestra.
My eyes compacted enough to trap your silhouette
as you danced your appearance vivid.
I traced you in my mind so I would never forget.
I watched pieces of my heart shatter
upon each breath I took.
Watched unspoken words fly circular through
the box of memories I have stored in my mind.
Remembered that I will never be whole
and the scar on my soul will never heal
Just wanted you to know, like every other,

I thought of you today mom

 

 

 

 

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To my mother who died 7 years ago, I think of her everyday!

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  • evelynxxoo
    March 4
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    its plain to see in your words of love that your mother played a big part in your life she was so lucky to have such a caring daughter who will keep her memory alive


  • grannyeri gold member
    February 25

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    Can imagine feeling like this about a lost parent. Lost my dad when I was just 10, so know that lost feeling. Sentiments well expressed in these lines.

  • Josh0517
    December 14, 2007

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    Absolutely heartwrenching! I dont know how you can turn lifes curves into such poetic words. you know I am here if when you need a shoulder, and I know you do. I love you baby!


  • Eon Blue
    December 12, 2007

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    Thank you for sharing. I know how you feel. Even though I haven't lost my mother, she lives very far away from me.
    One starts appreciating the love of a mother even more when she's not there. A big salute to all mothers in the world. I admire them deeply for they are true warriors.

    . Rewarded 6


  • KelliDanielle
    December 12, 2007
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    I love this! I can't even express how much feeling went through me when reading this!!! Great job!


  • opaqueangel silver member
    December 3, 2007

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    This is a very sad and very sweet poem! It is so nice to know thought that those who hsave passed on still are remembered, and always remember that if they are remembered they live on in us! ou have odne a very excelent job with this peice and you reaaly felt a cool sadness come over you as you read it! Thanks so much for your enery aand good luck! JKeep up the excelent writting!

  • lizwicker
    December 1, 2007

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    Wow that made me cry its how i feel about my mom.. i love her more then life.. i dont know how i would ever be able to deal with it if i lost her!!!!!!


    • Layne..
      December 2, 2007
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      Thank you for your read, much appreciated

  • Taby Hearts Ethan
    November 29, 2007
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    This is a great poem.
  • Brittle-from-NY
    November 22, 2007

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    Spine tingling!

    Layne, beautiful poem. Your mom would be truly proud of you. You are the best. We all miss her immensly. Elaine and Brittany

  • Nat
    November 21, 2007

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    I can't believe how popular you've gotten so quickly! But yes, this peace truly is spine-tingling. I've had dreams of losing my mom and just recently they wrote their will. It must have been terrible losing your mom at 19-she can't see you grow to an adult and grandchildren, etc. But she is watching over you from heaven and you will be reunited one day again
    -Roti


    • Layne..
      November 21, 2007
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      Thank you Roti, yes, it is very difficult, but I find some peace in my writing. Thank you for the kindess of words I tryuly appreciate that you read so much of my work!

  • Les89
    November 21, 2007
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    This is a very sweet poem. I can tell you were really close with your mom, good job!

    • Layne..
      November 21, 2007
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      Thank you for reading, I am glad you enjoyed!

  • Shakes-spear
    November 20, 2007

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    She Smiles

    When she hears you speek. Your mom watches over you and I know she is proud...as am I. Great job, The Shaker


    • Layne..
      November 20, 2007
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      Thank you for the smile you jsut placed upon my face with your usual kind and heartfelt words, your comments mean a lot to me, thank you
  • nothinghere silver member
    November 19, 2007

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    This is so heartbreaking, I can't begin to know this sort of pain but you just still manage to write it so eloquently... beautiful

    Karen


    • Layne..
      November 19, 2007
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      Thank you so much, that means a lot to me coming from you
  • MelissaMissy5
    November 19, 2007

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    Beautiful

    Not sure if you wrote this today but you can tell how emotional you are about your family. This poem is a perfect example of how much love you have for everyone in your family. Your words are so moving and I am sure your mom would have loved it. Cant believe it has been seven years!

  • perfectsunset
    November 19, 2007

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    This was so very beautiful and very emotional. It almost brought me to tears thinking of what i would do if my mom died. I don't think i'd be able to go on. Keep writing, because you're words are beautiful, and the message is powerful. Just one question though, which poem did I send you the link to in which you got the inspiration from? Because if you don't have a link to show me, than I don't know if you got on of my friend's poems for inspiration so please let me know soon. Thanks

    • Layne..
      November 19, 2007
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      Thank you so much for your kind words, I really appreciate it, I am glad you enjoy my work. Regarding the link I am not sure what you mean? Did I send you somthing accidentlly?
      Thank you again

  • moluv10
    November 19, 2007

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    This is such a heartfelt piece. It's kind of ironic that i wrote the piece about my brother friday and then all this happened to you this weekend. Well anyway, this is a great write. I know it must have been hard to write without getting emotional. life goes on but we know we can't forget about losing our loved ones but we can celebrate the goodness of their lives.


    • Layne..
      November 19, 2007
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      Thank you, yes it is strange that we just had a chat about your brother and today we talked about this, weird! Funny how life is, I will never understand it. Thank you for your comments

  • Emile
    November 19, 2007

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    good

    I believe that a mother/daughter bond has no match in the human equation. The love that you hold for your mother is remarkable and so self evident in this poem. You recall all the magic that surrounded your youth and recognize that your mother was the source and inspiration for that magic despite her leaving you. You have stored all the best your mother gave to you in your heart so that you may dispense it to others and they too can be touched by the experience. "out if your skin " doesn't make sense.


    • Layne..
      November 19, 2007
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      Thank you for your oh so kind comment, brought a much needed smile to my face and thanks for pointing out that error, your right it didnt make sense Thank you again for your kind words

  • Swangrnv
    November 19, 2007

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    beautiful n' touching

    My girl, you are in very reflective mood today , but promise not to let it weigh on you too much. okay?
    very good write though.


    • Layne..
      November 19, 2007
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      Thank you, yeah I am on a role, an unfortunate one, but still on one non the less

  • chrisl1360
    November 19, 2007

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    SO BEAUTIFUL, SAD AND TRULY HEARTFELT!!!

    LAYNE THIS WAS BEAUTIFUL, SO WELL WRITTEN AND SAD, VERY SAD! YOU JUST HAVE A WAY WITH WORDS, LIKE IVE SAID BEFORE REGARDLESS OF WHAT YOU WRITE ITS ALWAYS DONE SO WELL AND REALLY CAPTURES THE READER, I LOVED IT AND I KNOW SHE WOULD BE SOOO PROUD! 143
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