You want pain,
Feel this you bitch-
You want to feel,
Then feel this harder.
You want to cry,
Cry for yourself-not me-
You want me to open up,
Let's open you and discuss me.
You want my love,
It needs to be earned-
You want to feel sensation,
Get inside of me.
You can't begin to imagine,
The scope and depth of me-
You want to know,
about loving others-
First learn to love yourself.
You want my strength,
You want my pain,
You want my resolve-
Then read my words.
You want my mistakes,
both errors in judgement and actions?
You want to regret-
why? I don't.
You want abuse,
You want sickness-
Here- You can't have me.
You want my losses-
You can't withstand my losses.
You want my grief-
It will cripple who you are.
You want my memories,
First deal with your own.
You want my realities-
They are your fantasies.
A contest entry
- I want... by TeenageTears.
450 points, ended December 3, 2007, 12 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Turn that silver into gold pt II by whispernthedark.
400 points, ended February 9, 2008, 26 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I almost feel as if I've been assaulted, there's so much anger energy in the poem. It's very well written! Thank you so much for entering the contest, good luck.
♥
whisper
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Whispernthedark
Thank you for the comment-It seems the poem still has staying power-
Thanks again
RLM
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seems you've been busy again. i like the way you wrote this, it even though it does sound a bit angry it is also telling the other person to get their life together before trying to get with one and get into the other person's life.
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Shimmer
Thanks-
It came out angry-
As I commented in another post, the words took on a life of their own.
Look at the contest theme- I simply had a conversation with Teenage Tears-at least one interpretation of what that conversation might sound like-
kiss-
remember--get better!
RLM
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you sound a little angry in this one hon.
its very good. -
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OrangeB
No love-I'm not an angry person-In some works-the words take on a life of their own- Hope you enjoyed-
RLM
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woah! this is one of those shocking poems that you cant help but love!
fucking hell!
all i can say is damnnnnnnn!
that was amazing, suprising and awsome all in one.
thank you for entering with this amazing write!
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Teenage Tears
No--Thank you--You inspired me to respond in the manner in which I did-The words flowed like an out-of-body experience.
At the very least, it is a work that we did together-
Thanks
RLM
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