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Emotional Darkness

I see crimson, I see black
Switching on a cold warning façade
You still approach without fear

Can’t you understand
I am no longer of my own volition
The anger stirring in my blood
Blurs my once clear and steady vision

Stay away, don’t come any closer
For I see red as my heart bleeds
Through my bloodshot eyes and ears

I hear only empty words
Feel only coldness from your embrace
See only the nuisance of
Your efforts to comfort

For nothing can quell this beast
Grieving for the brother he lost

Forgive me if I hurt you
When my once rational mind
Loses to the pain-filled ache
Settled deep within my heart and soul

It’s best if you leave me be
Before I fully succumb
To the dark pits of fury, pain, and revenge

Never to surface
As I spun wildly in the vertex of this whirlpool
Until the very essence of myself
Disappear

I took one last glance at the world
That my once free spirited, lively being 

Could no longer stand to bear.  

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Existence

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  • georgie
    November 19, 2007

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    wow!!! powerful. sounds like you have a temper like mine lol. i love the way this is written... dont understand the whole story behind it but it reaches outta the monitor n punches u in the gut. keep up the gr8 work
    hugs,
    georgie,
    xxx
    oh... ps. the colours make it v hard to read... had to highlight it. maybe a brighter red?


  • PrInCeSsOfRoCk gold member
    November 19, 2007

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    awesome!!!

    wow that was so totally awesome!!! WOW it was so strong and very well written, quite dark which i like i dunno what to say but it was so great! good work!


  • BFMVfangirl
    November 19, 2007
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    Totally Awesome!

    I love the wording in the poem. Very dark, very straight-forward.

  • quietgirl
    November 19, 2007
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    good work. i agree, it is quite powerfull.


  • poeticweaver gold member
    November 19, 2007

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    A very powerfully inscribed piece from the heart.
    Thanks for sharing, and all the best in future writes.

    Peace, Timothy

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