Mystic crystal crevasse...
Looms yonder; lurking rear.
Reaching up with shadow arms,
to make me disappear.
Lunging forward to the universe,
Plea to the stars for support.
Clutching onto lack of help,
I feel my security contort...
-Slip- ~ I lose my grip,
The stars beyond my fingertips...
I grab and grasp and pull, and yet,
-a cry escapes my lips-
Flying to the heavens,
Clamber for footholds amongst the stars,
I realise I cannot drag behind me,
Things too far marred.
-lets go- All that I clung to
unneccesary - falls.
The thoughts I hung from stupidly,
had only formed my walls.
Through star-spangled heavens,
ecstatic soul soars...
The blissful joy in setting myself free,
Relinquishes me from those crystal jaws.
Author notes
Option 1 Inspired.
...I fear this is not up to the standards anticipated...
A contest entry
- . by Aurora Ceres.
700 points, ended December 5, 2007, 6 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Feedback please! Your eyes words help my vision... :-) Cheers for looking :-D
Comments
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Beautifully descriptive and so good to this prompt. I am pleased to see a trophy on this verse. Congratulations. ~Pamela
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This is very much up to the standars for this contest.You did a great job on this.I really liked it you were very descriptive and made how you were feeling very clear.Great job.Made me want to reach out and grab a hold of you and save you!
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hey i had not read this one before i like see u tonight
love lili -
Excellent
Honestly, I see a lot of meaning and emotion in this one. You mention you don't think it's up you the standards you anticipated, but just because a poem isn't what you expected or imagined it would be doesn't devalue it at all. Sometimes those are the best work. This one has an air of honesty and openess, and yet it's veiled in wonderful symbolism. It's a great piece.
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