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an old relationship

why do you have to leave me?
why does everyone in my life have to go?
me and you, it's a good thing, don't you see?
why can't you tell uncle sam, no?
why do you have to go, a third time to iraq?
you weren't the same, last time, when you came back,
please, put that drink down, and listen to me!

why can't you be the way you were before?
please, stop hitting me, your hurting me!
please, wake up, before i end up on the floor!
look at the bruises, can't you see?
cant you see, what you do to me, every night?
cant you see, come here, look in the light,
heres the bruises, see your slowly killing me.

please! stop drinking! stop poping those pills you dont need!
those pills i am going to flush them, the toilet, down!
let go of my arm please!! look at me! i am starting to bleed!
i am laying face down in a pool of my own blood on the cold ground.
i want things back the way they were before
back to before your first deployment, before you were so hardcore.
i cant believe you would actually hit me!

why are you drinking so much, do you know who i am, anymore?
you drink so much, that no one can keep up with you.....
if you dont stop drinking and poping, i am going to walk right out that door.
should i video this, so you know, just what you do.....?
i dont know what to do, anymore, should i go, or stay?
but, if i go, to you, my promise, i betray........
i dont know anymore, what is best for me.........

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option...drugs and drinking

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  • Symphony
    April 25

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    "here's the bruises, see you're slowly killing me" ... that line was heartbreaking.

    You could totally see the pain, the struggle, the emotions pouring through this work - bravo for writing it, and sharign it with us all.

    Thanks for entering


  • Sandra R Reynolds gold member
    July 4, 2008

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    I felt your struggle thoughout the write. There is so much hurt in this world if only people would stop and think.


  • Pandorea
    June 12, 2008

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    quite sad/dramtic. a few typos which detract from it a bit. but pretty okay.

    thanks for entering.


  • Pollycheck
    April 19, 2008

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    Thank you for entering my military contest. You have captured a sad and too often repeated story of the soldiers that return and are unable to cope.


  • poeticweaver gold member
    November 19, 2007

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    Sad, but very well expressed even in thoughts of pain.
    I hope you have better days, penning my thoughts seem to help me a bit.. I hope this helps you as well. Well done, pen on poet!

    -Timothy

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