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[ to All My Girls…. ]

TO ALL MY GIRLS….
WHO’VE CRIED AT NIGHT OVER A BOY
BECAUSE THEY WEREN’T TREATED WITH RESPECT BUT MORE LIKE A TOY
FOR ALL THE GUYS THAT SAID THEY’D CALL BUT NEVER DID
THEY WEREN’T ACTING LIKE MEN BUT MORE LIKE A KID  
TO THE ONES THAT LEFT BEFORE THEY WALKED OUT THE DOOR
KEEP WALKING YOUR NOT NEEDED HERE ANYMORE
TO THE ONE THAT KISSED YOU AND SWORE HE’D ALWAYS BE THERE,

BE GLAD HE’S GONE AND IN SOMEONE ELSE’S HAIR.

FOR THE HEARTACHES AND THE LONELY NIGHTS,

THE TIRED DAYS AND THE NEVER ENDING FIGHTS.

PLEASE NO DON’T SAY YOUR SORRY NO APOLOGIES

CAUSE AS WE KNOW, REAL DON’T LEAVE.

   SO HERE’S TO THOSE MEN, KISS OUR ASS……

BECAUSE THERE IS A GUY OUT THERE THAT WILL TREAT YOU LIKE A QUEEN

ALWAYS DOING AND SAYING WHAT THEY MEAN

 WANTING TO TALK AND SEE HOW WE ARE,

 NEVER STRAYING AWAY WHEN DRUNK AT THE BAR

 LOVING AND CARING ON GOOD DAYS AND BAD,

 KNOWING BY THE LOOK IN YOUR EYES IF YOU'RE HAPPY OR SAID

 I DO BELIEVE THERE ARE MEN LIKE THIS

BELIEVE ME GIRLS THEY DO EXIST

AT LEAST I HOPE :)

A contest entry

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  • lindaburns gold member
    December 4, 2007
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    When I read "CAUSE AS WE KNOW, REAL DON’T LEAVE" it seems as if there should be a word between real and don't. Like maybe real men don't.
    And where you say “KNOWING BY THE LOOK IN YOUR EYES IF YOU'RE HAPPY OR SAID”, I’m thinking happy or sad.
    Whacha think?


  • Shahrazad
    November 27, 2007

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    Lol- funny... I really liked that picture that ou chose to go with it as well. One thing that I might suggest would be to look at punctuation- perhaps trying the poem without all upper case letters and trying more commas, periods, and exclamations points where needed. I think it would really strengthen the poem. Good job- thanks for the entertaining read!


  • cupcakecultx33
    November 20, 2007

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    This is EASILY one of my favorite poems. I actually feel like this right now! My boyfriend always acted like a wild-child, that's why I liked him so much! Oh, well! Great job by the way!

    ~Jadeh♥


  • Dlvvanzor
    November 19, 2007
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    I typed my own name wrong. Wow.

    -Dlvvanzor

    There.

  • Dlvvanzor
    November 19, 2007

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    I'm sorry, one of the rules was no refrences to alcohol. I have to disqualify your entry. But I loved it! Especially the "someone else's hair." ^^

    -Dlvvanozr

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