Yet with this world of concrete and petrol,
filled with roaring symphonies of engines,
and boxes of colours and sounds,
we wander still,
elapsing moment to moment,
through millennia,history remain.
Living eternity till madness consume us,
and die.Yet we will rise,
rise again from the unscattered ashes,
us,the mockery of gods.
Author notes
um,this was inspirated by Anne Rice's the vampire chronicle book. hope you like it!
A contest entry
- No More Than Ten Lines by Cherokee.
450 points, ended November 19, 2007, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Invite only... by phoenixonfire.
300 points, ended March 16, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think as i'm trying to improve my english
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the mockery of gods...I like this write a lot! I am in love wid this write..this is such a beautifully worded and intricate write! I like the rythm that keeps up with the message of the write!
Thanks so much for entering!
luv n peace
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wow...i love it gramma--best of luck in the contest
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this is a very unique write indeed for the given prompt
I do have a suggestion though, not that it matters to a lot of people but i know it would to me as a contest holder. if you can add the image, DO. also, on a plain background like this, i would tend to lean towards a white or lighter text and left align it best of luck in the contest. be well and be blessed
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oh,ok.thank you.I'll fix it right now. :-)
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Good.
A unique piece on a topic that's not the easies one to pen upon.. but you did well. Thanks for sharing, and I hope ya do well in the contest! Thanks for the read.
Peace, Timothy
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Thank you,Timothy!!i'm glas you like it.I was worried it didnt sound quite right.Thanks again.
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