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She Pulls the Thread of my Demise

She pulls the snow white thread,
Up, down, through and through,
Piercing just below the skin,
skimming skittish nerves.
The fire burns, as thousands of
pin pricks break my shield.

She pulls the scarlet thread,
In, Out, through and through
layer upon layer of ravaged skin
is sewn together, pulled apart.

 

My eyes are closed to ease the pain

My mouth is sealed to quiet the screams

My wrist, eternally bound together

by the red thread of fate

 

She pulls out the letter opener

and points out all my faults

she outlines all I've done wrong

So that I will forever know

What a wretched little whore I am

 

the letter opener, now red

plunges, gouges, digs into my chest

She steps it through my heart

her lace-work breaks and a

strangled cry escapes gnarled lips

From a drowning throat.

My last vision from the living,

as tears of blood now fall

and heart beats are smothered

are the cold, dead eyes

of my dear old mother.

Author notes

Ok, so no, my mom isn't really murderous and I've never gone through anything remotely similar to this. like i've said before, the creepiest stuff flows from my mind on a content note.

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  • museme
    October 8
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    Great poem. Congratz on the trophy.

  • adarknesswithin
    October 1

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    interesting

    i guesses it was about a mom by the 2nd paragraph. says more about me than you. realy good visuals i saw your own viens being used as the thread to hold you together.


  • jcat gold member
    November 18, 2007

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    Well now that I am truly horrified.... that ending was extremely twisted!!!! I LOVE IT!!! You did a fantastic job with this, however, your mind frightens me!!! hahaha.... Just excellent!!! Thank you for entering and good luck in the contest.

  • DarkRomantic113
    November 18, 2007
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    An interesting story from the maze of your mind. Well done.

    • Forest Eyes
      November 18, 2007
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      Yeah, I don't think I got it quite right though. I might redo it later.

      Thanks!

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