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~Counting Stars~

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I know you're there
Feeling around my heart..
touching teh spots where life..
isnt there..

Knowing me..
feel the pain inside..
Abtractiona..
Allabriosa..
Darrectiosa..
Allamniosaria..
Kalliksareria..

Over the pain
over the stars
over the sea
over me

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9 10 11 12..

I know where you are..
acting as if you dont know me..

Hold my hand..
let go...
I don't know if i should go..

Hearts are..
gonna..
feel the..
pain
feel the..
feel the..
pain..
feel the..
feel the..
feel the..
pain...

We'll bond together as we come along..

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I know that things are..
different..
always the way you want it to be..

I believe you know..
who i really am..
do you know what i feel right now..?

I trust in you to know who I am.. now

Wish you knew how I feel

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........................

I wish you knew
who i really was..
just a kid lost in a really big world..

Young and not so free
take away from me
everything I trusted so dear..

You..
are..
my friend
you are my friend
you are
my friend..
you are
my friend..
you are
my friend

you are..


my lover.


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La dee dee da..
la la la la.. la la la la..
Dee doo doo dee doo
la dee doo dee do..
la de de do dee do..

I belive you are my best friend
you are my best friend
you are also my lover

you are my friend
and my lover

Trust in you..
trust in me..

Busted fears
Cracked mirrors
falling stars
meteoria
serioria
allabastoria..

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will you be there
when i am dead
will you kiss my grave again..?

you will know
how i really feel
when you leave tears upon my grave

you are my friend
you are my friend
you are my friend
you are my friend
you are my friend
you are my friend..

Author notes

It's an epic, that's all i can say. And i tried best as possible to line up the words wiuth teh song o.O

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  • mizzamerica91
    November 19, 2007

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    i found it hard to read, for many reasons, i thought that the colour of the fonts and the background made it hard to read. Also, the repetition and numbers i felt made the poem lose flow. The poem in its-self is good, i can see what you are trying to get at, however i think that you could have used more creative and imaginative words.
    Further, after reading your authors notes, i am unsure as to what song you have based this poem on, and am curious to know.
    Although i found it hard to read, i thought that it was a good poem, that just needed a little work, because the thought and structure is behind it, it just needs to flow a little better, and have a few more descriptive words.

    This is just my view, others may feel differently, and good luck with future writes.


  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    November 19, 2007

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    G'Day Renegade Angel

    Very beautiful write, unique and different.

    I had to highlight it to read it though as the colours are all dark.

    Powerful write
    Stay safe
    ~Amanda


  • MagicaI
    November 18, 2007
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    oh btw those made up words ending in 'ia' i dunno waht to put there so i just threw em in x