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Ghost chains

Chains of reminiscence
Holding me
All sense of presence lost
This void
Prison of the past

Wanting to escape
Knowing your eyes
Those wonderful eyes
Could save me

{Still these chains hold me fast}

Blinding me to what I should be
Only showing what I was

  Failure
           Pain
                R e g r e t

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Well this sucked.......................................................................................................

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  • My Darkness
    March 2, 2008

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    wow this is absolutely beautiful... i'm sorry it took so long to comment, i'm rather busy these days... but i can't wait to read more from you! miss ya!

  • rising electric
    December 22, 2007
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    Powerful imagery and layout. It didn't suck!
    Thanks for your comment.

  • genodoughty
    December 22, 2007
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    interesting reading about the dark side

  • Diatribes
    December 21, 2007

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    What sucked, the binding meomery that made you write this?
    Thats understandable, some memories are worse than a poltergiest, raging amok with chaos inside the spirit.
    (cause i know you di not mean the write sucked )

    • Despairkitty
      December 22, 2007
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      lol Thanks for reading and commenting. I swear I play Warcraft too much and I get confused now when I see your name. My undead warlock and I are still kicking ass and doing your name proud. (boy I really am geeky sometimes.)
      Despair

  • waterswim123
    December 15, 2007
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    wow this is rly good i love the line

  • leicester
    December 14, 2007

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    Reminiscence, rememberance, memories, all are chains, all hold us and our prescence is lost for while.
    Your words are very true. You find words I have been looking for and could never find.
    Marvelous.
    Victoria


    • Despairkitty
      December 18, 2007
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      Thank you so much for reading and commenting. i appreciate it.
      Despair


  • Haunted Doll
    November 21, 2007

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    back with a vengence hehe did not suck!! you never suck *pouts* this was awesome. i love the title. so eerie and haunting. ya i lack vocabulary to describe this but i am trying great!!


  • Raida Boy94
    November 18, 2007
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    I'm glad to see that you're back kitty because I miss you're poems *smiles*.


  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    November 18, 2007

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    G'Day Despairkitty ♥

    I rather like this write; I wouldn't say it sucks at all.

    Strong with a great flow and style!
    I like the dark imagery this paints across the screen.

    Stay safe
    ~Amanda

  • ankkuri
    November 18, 2007
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    I wouldn't say that it sucked. It has an eerie feel to it - the word choice & the way the poem is set up. I liked the fact that "prison of the past" and "chains hold me fast" rhymed, even though I'm not sure if you did that intentionally. Good job with this!

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