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Sue and the man with the star

I will tell you a story
sad but true,
of a foot in the mouth
of co worker Sue

a better job,
she went to seek
not enough jack
at the end of the week

at lunch one day
she went to apply,
the personnel dude
seemed like a nice guy

why would you like
to work here said he,
and leave good employment
of long history?

the benefits suck
and the hours I hate,
she said never a raise
in a seven year wait

     wasn't the best thing
     she could say, I admit
     but not really that bad
     if she'd known when to quit

my current bossman
does not like to pay,
he's Jewish and cheap
you know what they say...

     what the guy must have thought,
     I could only surmise,
     what a slap, what an insult
     and quite the surprise


he said to miss sue,
you just don't seem right
for the position we have,
good luck with your plight


he stood up with purpose
and showed her the door
and said, can't you read
or is your eyesight poor?


bewildered and shocked,
what wrong did I do?

my name plaque says Finklestein
don't call us we'll call you

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

This is a true story, I've never let her live it down, even after 10 years.

In no way, do I mean to offend.

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  • Mirthryl
    November 23, 2007

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    Very upbeat rhythm and nice rhyming! Well-told, and funnier because it actually happened to someone you knew! Bad enough to stick your foot in your mouth, but then to kick with it...peevishness and grousing just never manage to come across as 'professional'! Congrats on the gold!


  • DrunkenRam
    November 22, 2007
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    Guilty

    That's great LOL


  • PerVirtuous
    November 19, 2007
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    Ha ha ha. I love it. You rock.


  • Quiet places
    November 18, 2007

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    Perfectly expressed!

    This is a fantastic poem on the big blunder!! Excellent form! Love the ryhmn and rythmn!! thanks for sharing!! Don Sil e u


    • Luna Tique Fringe
      November 19, 2007
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      no...sil e u, ty 4 da bun ez

      • Quiet places
        November 19, 2007
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        The pleasure is purely mine my lily of the pond!! If I were a frog you would have saved my life!! LOL And what a life it would be!! Bun ez for you!!


  • tomisb
    November 18, 2007

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    No matter how sour we are with our plight in life, nothing is well served when we throw negatives at those around us. She only proves all the adages about negativity and not saying anything bad about anyone.

    You do this very nicely tongue in cheek. There is an impishness in the air from the start of the poem till near the finish.

    Love Tom B.


  • sheltered
    November 18, 2007
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    Lol

    Gotta love a true story especially when told so poetically.


  • Cup-a-Joe
    November 18, 2007
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    Great! She didn't see the tree for the forrest.
    Great rhyme.
    Joe


  • Pollycheck
    November 18, 2007

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    Thank you for entering my contest and good luck. This is just hilarious. I really liked the rhyme pattern and the cadence was strong and even. Very nice job on this one.

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