for your small vocabulary
i spoke too little
to fill a dictionary with
us
Author notes
You don't know how much it is against my nature to abandon punctuation and capitalization. But this piece needed to be unhindered by either. It was too heavy with the shackles of grammar.
Please critique honestly.
A contest entry
- 14 words by lee-sharp.
14000 points, ended November 24, 2007, 66 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Speak your mind.
Comments
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i like the format of this poem. out of curiosity why did you choose to make the title an integral part of the lines, instead of making it the first line and leaving the poem untitled?
it's a very concise summary of a situation, "us" by itself on the final line works perfectly!
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Truthfully, the title is as it is because I wrote this for a contest for poems with 14 words. *laughs* But I also like the way that the poem makes a sort of sense (and a different sort of sense, at that) without the title compared to with the title.
Thanks!
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Remember doing this for the first time - no capitals, no punctuation. As a teacher who taught language arts for a number of years, I also found it difficult to do, but now think nothing of it anymore, and have comments now that I should use punctuation and capitalization more often than I do. Thought your author notes were right on.
Sure like the brevity of these lines and th significance of what you are sharing in them. Well done.
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