Descend, fall into my arms,
From on high the everlasting Cliffside…
Hold, hold my hand,
Remove these fingers of mine…
Don’t, don’t ever look back,
Lest it returns to tare us apart…
Look beyond, the still watered lake.
Keep on running; keep on running -
Turn a blind eye to the Dark Love you bring,
Look for the shine, look for the silver horizon,
Of your Love’s fickle scabbard blade;
Stop the breathing; stop the breathing -
Someone help me escape this torment and finally break free…
Free from Fate’s bloody grip; where the Lilly pads wait to die…
Grip me, hold me close,
Let me feel your lips again,
Whisper, speak my name,
Let me hear it once again,
Don’t, please don’t cry,
It’s not long now until I fade,
Look for me, beyond the lake of the dead Lilies.
Keep on smiling; keep on smiling -
Turn a blind eye to the Blood you bring,
Look for the shine, look for the red horizon,
Of your Love’s fickle bloodied blade;
Stop the bleeding; stop the bleeding -
Help me escape this torment and finally break free…
Free from Your bloody grip...
Where I wait to wilt and die...
Author notes
If I was a song writer, I'd be Rated E for: Extremely Stupid Lyric writer.
In a list
Tell me what you think, or don't, that works. Or tell me how shit it is. Be blunt. Like a hammer to the back of the skull.
Comments
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*hammer hammer*
No, seriously, I like. Does it have a tune? I must admit that it seemed really bizarrely worded for a poem, but as a song it makes more sense. I love the image "where Lilly pads wait to die" The punctuation is really intriguing to me... I like to think that it's intentional and not just me reading too much into things, but I like the way you ended it "die..." It was very predictive of a slow death without a complete end. Good write!
The one line I didn't like was "Help me escape this torment and finally break free..." I dunno, it didn't seem to fit with the fantastical air of the rest of it. But anyway, good write!
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Love It!!
How to describe this one Neko - it brings all sorts of visions to my mind - no way to describe it. Just...amazing.
As for the notes...I think it'd make a great song - quite rock-ish if you ask me! And the title...so appropriate!
Congratulations on recovering your muse. Nice to see it back.
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