Empty eyes and hollow skin.
Expressions mask the voice within.
Tears of glass softly shatter,
Onto the floor, all with a clatter
of screams that pierce and shed the night-
deep implanting that fear of fright.
Her heartstrings plucked; a deeper chord,
the tunes of life that she endured.
Her distant look, her vacant stare,
tell of times too hard to bear,
when thoughts were that of death or life,
whether to pursue the knife?
To slash another scarlet slit,
To end her woe and be done with it.
But that was just a thought, she sighed,
But that night she surely tried.
Now, surrounding her a pool of red,
Her throat ripped open, her features dead.
Her soul askew across the floor
just like she had thought before.
An empty carcass, stiff and cold
telling of the lies she told.
And in her hand a crumpled piece she wrote,
The remainder of this: her suicide note.
Author notes
"glowsticks and pickle juice"
Option 8
A contest entry
- Your Death by Beating.
450 points, ended November 30, 2007, 21 entries
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• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - misery loves company... by nobodys-girl.
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Comments
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this is absoltuly perfect. so dark, sad, and just depressing. the rhyme of it is amazing and really i just loved the entire poem. thank you so much for entering my contest and best of luck.
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I couldnt let this poem go without anything so its got hounerable well done
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I like that this is a dark story, it has talent to it unlike a lot of people writing the emo poems now just talking about cutting themselves... I mean come on, this is great... Keep up your great writing and good luck in my contest.
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very dark and strong words you penned here. The rhyme gave it even more strength. Flows well and I thank you for the entry
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Wow!
Damn this was a strong write! It has an excellent flow from the beginning to the end. I think it's really good, many Kudos to you!
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that was so freaking awesome! omg i loves it
it has raw emotion and it was just....so powerful -
wow! what an epic and haunting piece.
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Wow, nice one. Tell you what though, this reminded me of someone I know. Kind of reacting to emotions in the wrong way ya know. But anyways good job A+ for the day.
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