Your heart's ripped from your chest,
and it lies there on the floor.
Now you feel so empty,
you can love and care no more!
by whose hand was it lost, dear,
why sir! it was by yours!
Now you feel so empty,
and your heart lies on the floor.
It's shrubbed and it dying,
your heart has been abused.
And by the look of it,
it seldom has been used!
Theirs scars and their are slashes,
the small thing has been bruised.
And by the look if it,
your heart has been abused.
Now as people see it,
your heart still hurts inside.
Some poke at it with sticks,
while other people cried.
They watched as it stopped beating,
and now for sure it died!
Some people poke it with sticks,
and that still hurts inside.
Author notes
Picure prompt: http://i71.photobucket.com/albums/i150/pollycheck/not%20used/loveisstrange.jpg
A contest entry
- 40 Images for 40 Poets by Pollycheck.
425 points, ended December 2, 2007, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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yeah, well i have not finished it yet so I did not read it through to check spelling yet. I am glad you liked it all tha same.
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Thak you for entering my contest and good luck. This is an outstanding take on the image that you were given. You did a great job on the poetry, but this piece is marred with misspellings and grammatical errors.
"and it lies their on the floor."
Should be:
"and it lies there on the floor."
"by who's hand was it lost, dear,
why sir! it was by your!"
Should be:
"by whose hand was it lost, dear,
why sir! it was by yours!"
"It's shrubbed and it dieing,"
Should be:
"It's shrubbed and it's dying,"
"Theirs scares and their are slashes,
the poor small thing been bruised."
Should be:
"There are scars and there are slashes,
the poor small thing has been bruised."
"Some pock at it with sticks,"
Should be:
"Some poke at it with sticks,"
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