Momentous whispers inspire brightly
Like an orchid’s petals thriving to blossom
This celestial sentiment wanders rightly
For soul’s melody to dance and play possum
Such affair fabricated our spirits to entwine
To reminisce the bliss with an endearing paramour
Memoirs striking like electricity as they align
Near ebbing from obscurity to seek a dying savior
The finesse swaying and swinging along the skies
Winsome smile shaped by the glimpse of such radiance
Delirium pierces harmony to ask infinite whys
Mother’s voice reverberating to cease vengeance
Her song rhyming with staccato’s laughter
My heart sunk in guiltless ablution
Drawing out pensive witnesses thereafter
To blight and slay this tainted fashion
Now gazing peacefully at the splendid horizon
The astral plane created by shimmering sunshine
For mysteries dwell our insights ‘till it wizen
As I wish for heaven’s servants to mingle with mine
Author notes
This is a poem that I entered in a contest in another site ^^
I’m back to writing ever since from the contest I’ve made and another contest that the judge invited me to :3
Anyway, there were some options and I chose the word bank which was this:
inspire
orchid
celestial
melody
affair
paramour
electric
obscure
finesse
winsome
delirium
reverberate
staccato
ablution
pensive
taint
horizon
astral
mystery
mingle
let’s hope I win first place *crosses fingers*
and well, I hope I improved *sweatdrops*
although, I prefer allpoetry over the other site coz some of the members in the other site are mean T.T
anyway, see you and labu all!
In a list
A contest entry
- Anything Goes by karmacae.
700 points, ended February 14, 2008, 67 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Enjoyed this - thanks
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Great use of the words - well done!
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I think you did an awesome job with this beautiful piece you've created.
What is the name of the other site?
Thank you for taking the time to try and turn your green into a pretty golden cup. Good luck at judging, Cathy.
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This is such a beautiful piece of art, and from a 14 year old, hon, you got tallent!!! The flow was amazing...Your use of words, outstanding, wonderful job and thank you so much for shareng. .....Crystalgodess
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The motion of the piece is excellent ~ It may be the meter and the sound of the words if said outloud that gives it that light and airy flow... The metaphors really make this what it is... ~ Your use of the word bank ~ really makes it a very natural flow ~ I'm glad that you shared this on the A.P. ~ I'm also happy to see you here ~ Just remember your poetry... is just that ~ "Your" poetry~ don't value your work on the results of a contest ~ value the work as you see fit... ~ some work ~ i've written has never seen the light of a contest ~ nor ever will ~ it was written for me ~ Some work I have wrote for a contest ~ but always with my heart or for fun. I've even wrote for a couple contests just so I can try to test my ownself in stretching my weakness in my abilities. ~ Yet, through it all ~ I always only wrote for me ... If my piece was liked enough by the one person looking at it in the position to choose an award... then It would.... ~ that would just be icing put on a cake.... the taste of the write was always in the cake... ~ However, I can also understand when you pour your heart & soul into something you look at as super special ~and it doesn't win ~ knowing that eventually someone will have to view it the way you do.... ~
Your piece is beautifully said ~ I thoroughly enjoyed reading it ~ it moves the reader in a very whimsical way~ I think this can relate to many readers in many different ways.... I kinda like the way you left it somewhat vague, vague enough to leave it open to the reader to feed their mind and their thoughts. ~~
Thanks for entering my "Set the bar" Contest ~ I really appreciate you sharing your work with me ~ good luck to you ~ I hope you understand the 1st paragraph is said to you ~ for support and understanding ~ and in reference primarily to your Author's Notes... ~ Truly wish you the best of luck ~ your piece was nicely done. ~ ~ Welcome to the A.P. -
DQ
ONLY Pre-Writes that should have won a trophy. by lindaburns. 1050 points, ended November 25, 2007, 36 entries. DQ'd because entered in one of my earlier contests. -
Thank you so much for entering my contest. Good luck.
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Nice job
You did a great job and say alot in so few words. Some of the other sites are harsh cause they say there mind before they think instead of giving advice on how to help. I hope you have luck with you in your contest
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Written Well
I'll say you did a very good job of putting those words in context, of giving them meaning and linking them together. "Spirits to entwine" calls up visions of love which stay strong throughout until the mother line, which also calls up strong emotions. The first stanza is probably my favorite on first read. But after reading again, the rest begin to take focus too. I don't know that I got all your meanings, but I certainly got my own out of it and to me, that's good poetry!
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