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Different

He thought I had a cold.
But my nose was bunged up from
a night time of tears.

During the night,
I’d sorted out all my problems
and then tried to commence
the ‘Cure for Cancer’ congregation.

I told him why I seemed
different.
I told everyone my plans
and my trials, and what the
doctor had said.

In the morning,
I tried to untangle reality
from the dreams and nightmares
that I’d drifted home from.

I couldn’t do it on my own.

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Just some thoughts...

OK it's more than thoughts, it's about me. I haven't been well lately. I have symptoms that are totally out of character for me and what's worse I don't know what's wrong with me. The Doc's are on it, doing tests after tests, so fingers crossed it'll get sorted soon!

Please comment. I don't want sympathy (yet) so just thoughts on how the write is poetically is good thanks

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  • xXxTrojan-ManxXx
    January 31, 2008
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    *WOW* that was a very good write... hope you get better


  • Eternal-Dreamer
    January 3, 2008

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    this is a good poem i like it it shows your feelings and worrys abput whats going on with you, stay strong, :-) theres always a good side,


  • Hope Angel silver member
    December 23, 2007

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    This is a great write. I can feel your emotions througout the whole poem. I hope you feel better and Happy Holidays!


  • brooklynngirl
    November 21, 2007

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    Interesting.

    I had a little trouble getting the idea of the poem at first. i found the beginning a little confusing. But that would b more likely 2 come from my own stupidity than anything. I liked the story. i certainly will be praying for your healing.


  • anaisnais
    November 21, 2007

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    A touching piece, I wish you much luck with recovery and your write...much good could come from this...Best wishes -from a friend!';f'


  • michichoeret
    November 19, 2007

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    great write

    loved "untangle reality from dreams/nightmare"
    did not like "plans/trials and capitalized Doctor; remember he is also only human. he just had the patience to sit on his behind and study like mad...

    • silverscent gold member
      November 19, 2007
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      Thanks. I'll think about the plans and trials, but the capilatization of doctor was a typo, my word processor automatically capitalizes first letters on a line and I was too lazy to check it *slaps own wrist.*

      Thanks again.

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