her voice still lingers in my mind.
the tone,the slight nervous pitch to her words.
waiting for my reaction and reply.
once i replied,her voice stabled out,
and ended with a small grin of satisfaction.
she tried to hide it,
but she couldn't hold it in.
her eyes grew bright.
Shinning with relief.
i too,gave a little grin.
Which provoked hers to evolve into a smile.
Which provoked mine into a smile as well.
she began to blush,
turning her head letting out a giggle of anticipation.
she pointed behind me,saying what's that?
so i turned to see what it was she was talking about,
with out warning she thrust her self at me,
initiating our first kiss.
I remember it like yesterday.
the taste still lingers on my lips.
Author notes
first kiss memory love poem.
-bones
A contest entry
- Calling ALL Hopeless Romantics Come on in and show me what you've got! by PureRomance.
525 points, ended November 23, 2007, 25 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - anything goes by Lola Green.
370 points, ended January 11, 2008, 35 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
whats your opinion about it?
Comments
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somthing I would like to send to a friend of mine*grin* thanks for sharing with us.
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Beautiful work here my friend and congratulations
to you on your bronze trophy! Wonderful story
of your first kiss. Quite a feisty girl you found
there! lol Thanks a lot for sharing it here!
Jeremy0826 -
heavenly read amzing imagery as i read each line such a beautiful poem
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it seems that i can feel my lady whispering in my ears. nice poem.
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I must say congratulations on winning bronze again
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how sweet! lol did she need to sneak up on you to get a kiss?
(points) whats that over there!!!!!!!! (glomps)
Abby
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This was truly exciting. The anticipation made me anxious. But it was well worth what happened in the end. Congratulations on winning the Bronze Cup. I smiled throughout the entire read. You made me remember some youthful days and for that I gladly thank you. Excellent work poet!
Much Love & Respect ♥
Renee
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Excellent! I don't get why you got 3rd place, a poem like this should've gotten 1st place!
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wonderful
What a delightful poem. What's better than love!! And a FIRST KISS!! Memory never forgotten. This is enchanting!! Warm Regards...vivela
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this poem is so sweet. brings back memories long forgotten. good job.
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Hi Brant!
You are the consummate Debonaire Poet! If I ever get hooked up with anyone, I'm definitely going to contract you to compose some love poems for me!
Very good stuff, Brant! Really! Liked the development of the smile, into, into, into! Great!
John
Hey! Happy Thanksgiving!
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Ah to be young again and in love for the first time. This brings back thoughts on my first kiss. You have done well. Good luck to you in the contest.
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and here you go. I almost forgot.
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This is a very beautiful poem. I love it. Could you please put in your author's note what kind of love poem this is even though I know it is the rules and who you are here on AP please. This is an amazing poem. You did an excellent job in penning it. May God bless you in all you do and write, and good luck to you and your poem in this contest.
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wonderfully written and i loved reading this piece of yours so tender and loving i wish you the best in the contest
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wow. this is really good. it has very good imagery in it. I still remember mine and Cory's first kiss... it was fun... I miss seeing him all the time... but I see him tomorrow... so I'm really happy! keep up your great work!
Crimson -
You did a great job with this poem. I enjoyed everything about it. I like how it both started and ended. This poem will linger in my mind.
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Once again, this is an awesome poem. You did a fantastic job with the emotion, imagery, and flow.
Line #4 - once I replied, her voice stabled out,
Line #9 - Shinning should be Shining
Line #10 - I too gave a little grin should be I, too, gave a little grin.
The 4th to last line - thrusted should be thrust.
Still, awesome poem!
Write on.
~*~SP~*~
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