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Speak Faster

Time to write a poem
'Cause my mind's going insane
If I write it down on paper
I can put it in a frame
It was worth the awful feeling
Getting car sick on a plane
I thought I came to help him
What with work being a bore
But it turns out I just love him
Every visit even more
I can't think straight without him
I feel lonely in a crowd
Every time I am without him
I just want to scream out loud
Does he know that this is happening?
That I feel like half a maze
I can't find the other end of
I walk numbly, in a daze
That my heart keeps beating faster
That the hours go by like days
That I am not my own master
That my writing's all a haze
Living here without him
Seems like more than I can bear
I cannot catch my breath
He's my only gulp of air
And my hands are nearly shaking
As I run them through my hair
If the phone would only ring
If I heard the IM ding
I could sigh
and I would smile
And I can do anything

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  • D A Hunter
    November 18, 2007
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    Wow that was awesome Shandi!


  • Nephlim
    November 18, 2007
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    Car sick on a plane, interesting
    I liked the rhymes, they were obviously there and fitted well into the poem ^-^. My only suggestion would be to make the poem have more form so it would be easier to read, not just one big stanza. But it's really fine the way it is
    GREAT job
    diggin it majorly