ruddy, dirty knees
scrape aged mahogany floors
flesh backing
up
against the silvery
white cracking windowpane
legs shoot outward
smacking hard, violently
into the three-legged
plywood table,
the transparent glass
jar of brilliant fuschia
spring orchids
crash, broken shattered
shimmering glass spreads
across the dusty floorboards
where vintage wine glass memories
hover invisibly in the smoky air.
crimson tangled web of soft
hair tumbles over shaking
shoulders atop a trembling pair
of jasmine scented, henna tattooed
ivory breasts.
moonlight flows in bright
reflecting ecstatically
in your emerald eyes
following the sweet, sultry
perfume emanating like ripe peaches
from your quivering form
south to the plum jewel
between your loudly
fiercely rocking hips
slowly reverberating,
beginning to crest
as I sink my mouth
encompassing your entire
pearl of soft, flowing curves
surrounding your thighs
with my cupped, semi-translucent
flower soft palms.
Lowering my location
down the latitude of
your silken, milky white
intense, powerful
feminine body.
As your orgasm takes hold
crowning your enigmatic release
you call out my name
engulfed in your existence
i plead silently
for my heart, to finally release;
to be at ease.
Author notes
Just wrote it, know it needs revision, give me a path to start on. Thanks! Written while listening to Melissa Etheridge's "I Want To Come Over"
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You kept this moving along with a nice steady pace and flow. If I might make just a minor suggestion here… it appears to me that it would perhaps improve your work a great deal if you were to tighten the lines a little. This is usually accomplished by tossing out any unnecessary words and shortening the lines. You have a thoughtful poem here and I really enjoyed it immensely I am thinking perhaps it just needs a wee bit tweaking is all. Thank you for sharing your words with me and best wishes to you in all of your endeavors. Keep that quill dipped in ink and ever ready for use dear poet.
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This is a grand scenario of the love and the various siatuation which are chronologically moving with the melody of the love are truely very impressive and beautifully penned as well..just wonderful write is here...thanks for sharing it
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I think it takes some serious imagination...and a good vocabulary to realize what you are talking about. xD I actually like this poem, it flows nicely and the use of 'big words' entertains the book nerd in me. I say: GOOD JOB.
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That was awesome, I agree and disagree with the other comments, but in my own opinion it was some of the best erotic poetry I've ever read.
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kind of hard to follow but still kind of good.
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wow
sometimes you come across poems that are too long and over the edge with details, you've seemed to find the right balance of both, good job
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