I’ve had trouble recalling the sound of your voice
Since you got your cell phone.
You text me to say you miss me.
You email me
Just to say that I should go online more.
...WHY??
I have a fucking life.
I can’t sit still for hours on end
And just let time slip through my fingers
I have big dreams
Huge goals
And wasting away in front of a glowing box won’t exactly help me get there.
As a new friend
You ask me for my number
... “so maybe we can text sometime!” you say.
Really.
Whatever happened to picking up the god damn phone?
Or better yet,
actually coming to see me?
You wouldn’t even DREAM of such a thing, now would you.
Cause you couldn’t bear to get off your lazy ass
And
leave your beloved blogs
Your myspace
Your facebook
Your youtube
Your email
Your cell phone
Your texting
Your IMs
Your addiction.
Hide behind your computer screen
So I won’t see you laughing
Sign on to a new obsession
And throw your life away.
Why remind a friend that you still care about them
When you can send them a cheesy chain-text-message instead?
I’m sure they’ll view it the same way, right?
Isn’t that what EVERYONE is doing now?
Succumbing to the lure of technology’s latest drug
Which will only fuck us all over, in the end . . .
Through
Procrastination
Weight gain
Increased laziness
Social insecurity
Favoritism...
For one’s CYBER friends.
Do you even know these people?
Or are they just placating your ego
And making you feel popular, inside your head?
...what would your real friends think?
You know . . . the living, breathing human beings you actually see in the flesh?
Or have you lost them all to your new inanimate infatuation?
Hide behind your computer screen
So I can’t see your shame.
Cover yourself with text messages
To silence the quiver in your voice.
Bury your world in technology
So you won’t see me cry.
Author notes
dedicated to [most of] my friends ... and some of my family, too.
I'd appreciate some written acknowledgement. Thanks.
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Sad but true. I liked your line about new obsession.
I actually know someone who is obsessed. It started with chat then myspace then God knows what else. Completely shut themselves off from reality. Nothing wrong with technology but like everything else should be used wisely. Computers can be a blessing to people that are shut in. Cell phones really come in handy when in a car in case the car breaks down. I was so happy I had one when my timing belt broke at 1:30 in the morning on a dark road in the middle of nowhere! (lol)
Well done!
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Brilliantly written but not yet totally agreeable. This is a very clever poem and most is true but yet we all sometimes fall under it and become *bunnies* and it's not necessarily the worst thing in us. Everyone falls into new technology and it is just the way the world is. Sometimes, however, you have to look at it through younger peoples' lives; i mean at my age you can just get up and go out (and i really wish i could) and it is sometimes that way for older people.
As a new friend
You ask me for my number
... “so maybe we can text sometime!” you say.
Really.
Whatever happened to picking up the god damn phone?
Or better yet,
actually coming to see me?
I also do want to say this to. If i could go and visit friends anytime i wanted i would (and i do my best to actually try to) and i pick up the phone all the time if i haven't talked to them in a like 2 days.
I do understand where you come from and i have to agree with somethings, but understand where most of us come from. This isn't a bad poem though I just have to critique things when they are disagreeable. Keep it up and keep on writing!!! -
Amazing, and so so sadly true. You get your point across clearly and not one bit of it is lies.
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this is one of those writes that almost wants me to critique it in a controversial way , because it evoked a double reaction [the first one being a smile-not necessarily a happy one] more of a cynical one , because of the way you prented an almost "vent" type write. The second reaction was that of a sort of melancholy for the times when things used to be the way you would like them to be [and I am NOT ancient] so it has not been that long ago
. Unfortunately every line represents today's world. Personally I do not recall the last time I got a thank you note or a greeting by snail mail. That seems to be reserved solely for junk mail re advertisements and phone calls are generally from those soliciting funds for a charity and such. You did an excellent job and I hope you will forward a copy to those relatives and friends that you are addressing. Maybe they will get the message or they will "TEXT" you back to "get with the times". I enjoyed, thank you,
reenie
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ominus bominus.
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the irony of it.
nice rate.
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Very true, Well written.
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Wow, such a deserved diatribe
This is so cutting and accurate. Your points are well stated. The first stanzas about having a life and goals is great. Fantastic write.
Tecohe
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I’ve had trouble recalling the sound of your voice
Since you got your cell phone.
You text me to say you miss me.
You email me
Just to say that I should go online more.
...WHY??
I have a fucking life.
I can’t sit still for hours on end
And just let time slip through my fingers
I have big dreams
Huge goals
OK SO FIRST I HAVE ALSO FALLEN UNDER THIS SPELL AT TIMES BUT WHO HASN'T. I LIKE THAT YOU SAY YOU HAVE DREAMS AND GOALS AND NOT JUST A GOAL OF STAYING AWAKE TO CHAT ONLINE.
Cause you couldn’t bear to get off your lazy ass
And
leave your beloved blogs
Your myspace
Your facebook
Your youtube
Your email
Your cell phone
Your texting
Your IMs
Your addiction.
LOL WHILE READING THIS I WONDER IF YOU HAVE ALL THESE. THERE ALL ALOT OF THINGS THIS WORLD KEEPS US BUSY WITH EVEN IF ITS NOT A FORM OF REALITY.
For one’s CYBER friends.
Do you even know these people?
Or are they just placating your ego
And making you feel popular, inside your head?
...what would your real friends think?
NOW THIS IS THE REAL SCARY PART. YOU NEVER KNOW IF PEOPLE ARE HONEST WITH YOU OR IF THERE PLAY INTO YOUR WEAKNESSES.
Bury your world in technology
So you won’t see me cry.
GREAT LINES HERE. SO ALTHOGHER I LOVE YOU POEM ITS REAL EMOTIONS AND REAL PROBLEMS THE WORLD SHOULD BE FOCUSING ON. I HOPE YOU DONT FALL UNDER THIS SPELL BECAUSE YOU SHOW REAL TALENT WITH YOUR WRITING.
--BROOKLYNN
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The irony of this poem is that it is posted on a internet-based community and being read by poets who probably spend a certain amount of time each week on internet social networks (like AP, like the others you mention in this poem). :-D If it had the same effect on everyone else as it had on me, than I'll see a lot of fellow poets bringing their notebooks to the park later today! Yay for fresh air.
But what I enjoyed most about this poem was how well you used bold and italic lines to establish the music and flow of this piece. I could actually hear your voice while reading through this, which I can't say about many poems. Anyway, good luck with all your friends and thank you for the poem. -
Point taken, our society is closing itself of from, well itself. It's a fight some days to keep my cell in my purse instead of in my hand because I'd love to get close to people. (That's why I love camping or when the power goes out)
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Wow....... I am astounded at the eloquence you have in describing one of the worst social diseases we have seen to date. I hope readers take this to heart, we could all benefit by growing our personal relationships in the flesh. Thank you for your observation.
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Oh dear.... this sounds like me so much... Oops... I mean yeah, sure I'm on my lappy coz I'm writing a novel and to do it by hand is a utmost terrible thought but still! I can't actually remembered the last time I went and called someone... Perhaps I should...
lalalala moving on!!
Great write (and eye opener) thanks for that !!
~*~* Angel *~*~
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wow...this kind of depresses me...I'm on the computer alot. and by alot I mean if I'm not working than I'm on the computer. Granted I'm a graphics designer and in a long distance relationship, I still am on way too much. I think this actually motivated me to hang with some old friends I haven't talked to in a while. Thanks for the write, it was good.
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jcqlnclvn
Very appropriate for today....this is a very good poem. Very well presented.
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WOW
Wow this is so true and i guess im pretty guilty of doing this too but after awhile i prefer to actually talk to my friends compared to txting.
"Hide behind your computer screen
So I can’t see your shame.
Cover yourself with text messages
To silence the quiver in your voice.
Bury your world in technology
So you won’t see me cry."
i loved these lines they are so good and yet they just make me want to cry.
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wow yeah i commented on this on facebook. what i didnt say then is that i likked the poem and its very true. people never talk on the phone any more or any thing like that its kind of sad. what is moree sad tho is that even tho we realize the flaw in our ways we probably wont change them because i knowe i am to lazy to call ppl i still love u tho babe!
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....*Embarassed as Hell right now...*
Oh, damn...I'm never texting you again. AMybe even not messaging you or commenting over this...Should I actually PICK UP MY PHONE AND CALL YOU? I'm actually...really ashamed. Sorry. Love you.
-Viv
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Awesome
This is our world today...devoid of connections, humanity, personal touches....we are monitor cowboys and girls...we can be anything we want to be...except for fragile humans....I loved this piece!
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i think you're on to something here. i have used my online experiences basically as therapy through this name as it was started that way. i know i'm not on here much, but it has encourage me some in my writing. it doesn't mean i think i'm good in any way, but without this technology, i may had to check into a place that would lock me away for some time to deal with everyday life. on the other hand, i can see where people become addicted to it and choose it over going out and live life as in going to a drive-in, amusement park or spending time with friends or family just goofing off by the lake. i'm into the technology part of it like the cellphone (even though i was late getting there as i resisted getting one for a long time). i do text, but i'm more likely to call over texting. i generally respond to textes and rarely initiate them. it comes in handy at times and is when i will start one if i need to know something and knowing the other person can only text back for they are not aloud to use the phone as in talk. as for ripping family time, i do feel this is the case for many. itz why i make sure that the computer is not the highlight of every day and do something that's worthwhile. i wish for you that (most of) your friends and some family members will begin to see it's much better to see you in person and if that's not possible, then at least hear your voice.
DARK
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