Within this realm of
chilled azure; bound
by Winter's icy caress~
I find myself utterly
captivated; intertwined
in a wintry menagerie~
Crystalline dancers glide
about; carried aloft,
amidst eminent peaks~
Behold its beauty, emblazoned
upon wafts of frigid breath;
ne'er to extinguish~
Author notes
Photo credit with permission:
http://www.appleblossomart.net/Wallpapers/Winter-In-The-Mountains-Wallpapers.htm
There is just something about this scene that I find utterly captivating.
A contest entry
- Anything Goes (Almost Anything) by Carly Pop.
500 points, ended December 15, 2007, 23 entries
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Comments
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I loved this too. Winter is my favourite time of the year. If I had my way, it would be winter all the year round, haha
I found this breathtaking. You imagery again, is something that stood out for me in this.
I was transported into this piece. I could feel the snow, feel the coldness breath in the crisp fresh air. Ahh, wonderful writing my friend.
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Thank you for so many gracious comments, Wayne.
I love scenes like this. The snow drifts tend to remind me of crystalline dancers gliding along the peaks, especially those of Mt. Ranier in my home state of Washington. I saw that you're from Great Britain. I visited Portsmouth in 1989 while I was in the Navy. I loved that visit.
Don
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Impressive work...
Great imagery & wordplay/choice/use wrapped in a calming narrative that made for a compelling read & enthralled throughout...
Keep up the good work...
Well done!!!
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Thanks again, Fritz.
I really enjoyed writing this one. So much of my poetry is about nature, which I really love to write. I really like to write this way, and sometimes I write the polar opposite with darker imagery, depending on the genre I'm exploring. I can relate a lot to what you wrote about your own writing on your page.
Don
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I love the verbiage, one of my favorite images you chose to use, extinguish which I closely associate with fire and the ice theme, that was a really neat motif and it made this piece very nice.
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beautiful and serene winterland. your words expressed are fanatastic and leave a chill of excitement. I love the snow, having lived in CO for half my life and more. awesome write.
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Thank you kindly.
Colorado sure does get a lot of snow, huh? My dad grew up in Minnesota, so I'm sure this was a pretty common sight for him to see. I live in Washington State, and we don't get nearly as much snow, but Mt. Ranier sure does look like what's in this photo. In this poem, I enjoyed writing about the snow drifts. I described them as the "crystalline dancers."
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you are welcome. yes it does. you live in the rainy state, or at least I hear. I bet Mt. Rainer is gorgeous and breathtaking in person.
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smiling....
Yeah, Washington State is definitely known for its rain. When I was a kid, I saw somebody with a t-shirt that said "We don't tan in Seattle; we rust." That's so true. I feel my bolts rusting already.
Mt. Ranier is very breathtaking. I imagine the Colorado Rockies are, too.
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Lol, I like that saying. It's like here, the saying goes, 'If you dnt like the weather, just wait five minutes.'
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smiling....
I'll take that saying over the rain any day.
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LOL, ok, I will switch you, I love the rain.
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You've well expressed your thoughts of enjoying the views and the chill while being amidst snowy mountains.
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Thank you, Harrisham!
You're comments on this are appreciated so much. I love nature poetry. Don
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Beautiful. I could feel the chill, and see the mountains as I read. Wonderfully done.
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Thanks again for your kind words.
That photo reminds me so much of Mt. Ranier in Washington State. This is my favorite winter poem that I've done so far.
Don
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Great write. Thank you for entering the contest! Good luck!
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You do have a penchent for mountain poems and your imagery and flow is excellent. These poems are a joy to read.
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Thank you!
This is my favorite winter poem I've written. Don
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I love the beauty winter expresses even living in the Midwest. You have painted its palatte in vibrant hues in the warmth of hearts. we just had almost 5 inches of snow on Wednesday tho newscasters were claiming we'd only get about 1 or so. many blessings always xxx
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Thank you so much.
I really loved writing this poem. I have such a deep appreciation for nature. Half of my poems are written about nature's treasures.
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You should write a book, really. This collection is so beautiful.
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You are so sweet.
Thank you!!! I don't think I could get a kinder compliment than that. I would love to publish a book of poetry. I've written more nature poetry than anything, but I'm starting to branch out, and learn different genres. Sooner or later, I hope to publish some of my cartoons. I've been cartooning since I was 10, although not professionally.....yet. I think it would be just a huge thrill to see a cartoon of mine get published in the New Yorker. When I get a scanner, I will probably add some cartoons to my humor poetry. My friends and family who have seen me draw cartoons for most of my life say that I am in the wrong line of work. My 10 year old son is a born writer and cartoonist. His work just amazes me. I want to share something he wrote when he was 9, as a matter of fact. Don
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"upon wafts of frigid breath"....I love this line best!
Such expression of atmosphere and season;
Wonderfully displayed in poetic ballet. Blue
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Thank you so much, Blue!
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The scene is captivating,
but your words are entrancing.
I can't say that I would look
at this picture and find
the enchantment that you found.
You have the heart and the visionof a true poet.
This is exquisite!
~Pastel
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This lovely poem is extremely picturesque and replete with memorable imagery, and acombined with it's subtle personification of wintry nature, was a refreshing delight to read.
David
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Thank you, David!
Your comments are always so thoughtful. There's such a majestic quality to the mountainside in the photo. In Washington State, where I live, we have some similar scenery on Mt. Ranier. It's truly breathtaking. Don
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Chilled azure - I really like that, it's so simple, but works really well
Icy caress too - nice oxymoron.
Winter is exceptionally captivating. Well I suppose all seasons are!
Crystalline - love that word, and coupled with dancers glide it's just...perfect.
Well..excellent, it's all I can say
Well..beautiful as well
Take care x
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Thank you very much.
This just makes me smile to read. I do love those adjectives. Sometimes, I might rely on a little too heavily on them, I think. Your kind comments are appreciated a great deal. I'm so new to writing poetry, really. I started writing a little under a year ago. Knight70
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So where is Mt. Rainier? ha ha, Don your words help me appreciate nature a lot more. I lkie "Crystalline dancers" great image.
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Thank you, Jeff.
I almost used a photo of Mt. Ranier for this poem. I sure do love to look at such a majestic mountain. It is so easy to appreciate nature for all its splendor. Don
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