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This Thing They Call Love

I stand in the breeze,
As it blows
Through the hills and meadows.
My cares and worries doth it ease.
For past my ear,
The sweet name whisper
A sound that makes my heart race faster.
This melody I long to hear.

Golden wings lift me
To fly with the angels
Through the sun-soaked clouds.

I sail on and on through the moonlit lake.

If dreaming, I pray I never do wake.

 

For while you lie here

Inside my loving embrace,

I am lost,

In this thing they call, Love.

 

And you know what?

 

If this, is how it feels,

 

Then I don't want to be found.

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  • Melodies
    December 7, 2007

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    A totally fine poem...

    I'd like to join you on this adventure! The imagery is so appealing.


  • DarkWind
    November 30, 2007

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    marvelous

    If someone has penned a better description of how it feels to hold someone you love I have never read it, this had me enraptured and you how hard it is to do that to me.
    May the stars always light your path,
    DW


  • The Poetic Bandits gold member
    November 26, 2007

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    9pts...

    Thank you for contributing to the reading list of The Poetic Bandits, and congratulations on receiving the HM

    ~Lilac


  • HeavenScent4U
    November 25, 2007

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    this was a very beautiful and heartfelt write, very soothing too congrats on the HM. i would make a small suggestion here and i find myself making it often, nothing personal i think it might be taken into consideration of not starting every line with a capital letter if it isn't a new sentence, just seems to read smoother like that be well and be blessed


    • Artistic-Soul
      November 25, 2007
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      see now i had always been taught in school to capitalize the beginning of each line

      I guess they got something through my thick skull


  • Polaja Greeters member
    November 24, 2007

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    This is such a heartfelt piece... I loved the imagery... especially in the second stanza... you have written a wonderful declaration of love... and the ending is simply perfect...

    Keep writing

    Polly


  • freespirit51
    November 22, 2007

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    You have penned a beatiful and loving piece. I hope to someday feel this feeling once more. It is a feeling that once you feel it you never want to lose it. Great work and acongratulations on the Honorable Mention.


  • warrior-eagle
    November 20, 2007

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    Wow. Congrats on the HM. This was very well written. I liked how simple you wrote it and it was just an awesome write.

    ..Simply Me♥


  • grannyeri gold member
    November 20, 2007

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    Lovely ending - who wants to be found when they can enjoy being with someone like how you express in these lines. Easy to read and understand what you mean when you write this. Nice silver earned with this write in this contest.


  • esroddo silver member
    November 19, 2007

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    Congratulation On the Silver

    What a beautiful write I love this stance. I made me fell at peace. LISA
    "Golden wings lift me
    To fly with the angels
    Through the sun-soaked clouds.

    I sail on and on through the moonlit lake.

    If dreaming I pray I never do wake"


  • Shamanicmusings
    November 19, 2007
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    Ahh..... This is lovely.
    Good rhyme and metre too.


  • ronnica
    November 19, 2007
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    Very romantic, love lost in the best possible way, Nice to read this.


  • Lady Altheia gold member
    November 19, 2007

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    Very nice poem. Love is a powerful emotion. It can be the greatest feeling in the world. I like the romantic aspect of it.

  • piccola silver member
    November 19, 2007

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    Really beautiful write that you have penned here. I particularly liked the ending. Love is like that I guess..reminds me of "if this is a dream never let me wake"


  • RatherImaginative silver member
    November 19, 2007

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    Like a drug it seems, sometimes. You've expressed the emotions beautifully. Anyone who reads your piece is taken on that flight with you to certain degree.


  • Rita Krocha
    November 19, 2007

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    Wow!!! Gorgeous~
    Love love love~ Oooh!!! I really love it!
    There's really some magic with the word itself and you have so beautifully described it so very well.

    A pleasure reading it


  • DarkWind
    November 18, 2007
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    hmmm a little, more awkard than most of your poems but still verry good

  • blondy19
    November 18, 2007
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    i loved it

    its very good. your work has always been the best to me.


  • Angelic Princess21
    November 17, 2007
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    very nice poem. thanks for entering and best of luck!

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