I want to be your everything,
I want to be the one,
I want you to be mine
More than anything under the sun,
I want to be in your arms,
I want to be held close,
And I want to be that special girl
You care about the most,
I wish that you would notice me,
I wish that you would care,
What is it that you don't like?
My face, my eyes, my hair?
I guess it wasn't meant to be,
Before it began it was the end,
But it will always kill me
To think your just my friend.
A contest entry
- My favorite poem!!! by Lola Green.
530 points, ended November 23, 2007, 51 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Love by Roseycheeks15.
300 points, ended November 23, 2007, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think!!!
Comments
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Great Poem! I love it!
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Guilty
I like the flow of this, the content is reminiscent of junior high, jogs memories of puppy loves.
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Congratulations on your beautiful bronze trophy. I thought this was a wonderfully written poem. I can see why it placed. Cathy
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This was a good poem. I really enjoyed reading it...however, you may want to run through it again, and clean up the punctuation a bit. Maybe change some of those commas with periods or whatnot. Other than that,you did a great job and congratulations on the trophy! Hope that helps
-Tim
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This is sweet! good luck in contest!
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TRY AGAIN
I don't know if you read the rules, but no lovey-dovey mushy poems...This poem also has one too many grammatical and mechanical errors for me to put up with. Submit another poem. -
Beatifully written. I have felt this way before. Great write!
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