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DOA (Dead On Arrival)

My brain is going on a rapid fire sequence,
Spitting out random words, images, and thoughts
I try to grab hold of them
But they disintegrate as soon as they hit the air
DOA (Dead On Arrival)
Feelings of fear whisper through me
The magazines are speaking louder though
“You’re not real, you’re just an illusion
It’s all an illusion”
The whispers of fear turn to internal screams
I’m tempted to scream
Just to see if I’m still there
I breathe in and my chest moves
That’s something at least
I take my pulse
And it’s a butterfly’s beating wings
About to explode out of my wrist and fly away
I can feel the prickling stares of strangers
Stabbing into me like a thousand sharp needle sticks
Do they know I’m an illusion and not really there?
But where am I?
What happened to me?
When did I get lost?
The rips and tears in the fabric of reality open wider
And I’m falling through
Down, down, down
I have a feeling when I hit the bottom
I’ll be gone
DOA (Dead On Arrival)

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  • x-Black-Butterfly-x silver member
    June 10

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    hmm this is different and speaks a lot that i find intresting and it flows freely which does seem to emphasize things within it. well done

  • xx-shatteredsoul-xx
    November 19, 2007

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    Good write. I think, however, you could have made it flow a little better. thanks for entering though~