A smile tugs at her cheeks,
Showing that dimple you can't resist,
Her tounge traces her mouth,
Followed by her bitten lips.
Is her thoughts of you?
Or is she just tempting you?
Her mouth in a pout,
One you know so well,
Body language made towards you,
You move towards her, under her spell.
Her eyes burn into yours,
Engulfing you into her being.
Your somehow by her side,
Your hands on her waist,
Feeling that silky skin,
Wanting to see the rest.
Pressed against her tight,
You know you won't let go.
She breaks her focus from you,
Her gaze glances behind you,
That same face appears,
The one she did to you.
Her attention gone from you,
Onto another victuim.
She's somehold got you hooked,
When you already belong to another,
Only then you think of her,
And your conscience takes over.
How has she put you under this spell,
As she did was look at you.
The feel of her lips against yours,
Her skin against you,
Her hands tracing your body,
Her taste staining you.
All too soon she's gone,
All promises followed her.
There was no love there,
No real emotion, no care
All she was, was a dream,
Makes you wonder, was she ever there?
Author notes
Asmodeus: Lust
image from site: http://blackeri.deviantart.com/gallery/
http://blackeri.deviantart.com/art/The-Seven-Deadly-Sins-LUST-16676260
(i do not own these pics or pic used in my piece)
I apologise not my best piece.
I found this difficult to do, but I gave it a go.
Hope its ok, DQ if need be.
Thanks
sky xxx
A contest entry
- Seven Deadly Sins - [PIF Contest] by Grimoire.
650 points, ended November 26, 2007, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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SCORE 1-10 POINTS IN FOLLOWING CATEGORIES:
Title 8
Flow / Meter 7
Depth / Clarity 7
Theme 8
Feelings / Imagery 9
Grammar / Spelling 6
Presentation / Format / Style 9
Uncommonness / Originality 7
Sit & Ponder Affect 7
Ability to follow Rules / Prompt 8
Score: 75
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Very well written.
"There was no love there,
No real emotion, no care
All she was, was a dream,
Makes you wonder, was she ever there?" very nicely put at the end. I enjoyed your poem.
Might not be your best piece as you've put it, but still brilliant never the less. ^_^
I wish you good luck in the contest.
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