bluebell by EvilKate at All poetry

have you heard
her soil
as it listens
to the promise

of water,

or seen her light
painting your sky
full of eyes?

have you tasted
her voice
on the lips of a wind
she breathes to you
with tongue,

or inhaled her scent,
a bluebell at dawn?

can you feel her

reach, daring to touch
beyond your
forest's depth?

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A contest entry

nerve by Zayra. 3200 points, ended December 9, 2007, 22 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest

Please tell me what you think (Critical Honesty Appreciated)

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Just Rob
December 10, 2007

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Yes
but it has taken fifty years to open myself.

This is a sort of poetry I wish I could write. It begs reading aloud, with music or nature sounds.
So seemingly simply written, but so rich, with a myriad of images wrestling with the message that reverberates in, and between, the lines. This is stunning poetry, written from a deeper pool. I really liked my entry for this, ran right out to a radio show to read it. But this! SOLID GOLD! I'm here to learn from better poets. Thank you for such a profound lesson.

Congrats, for your win, and your clarity of vision.
ellipsist
December 9, 2007

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wonderful final stanza... I like that the ideas and images are presented in the forms of questions... I think that lends a poignancy to the words that might not be present or as great if phrased differently...

very thought provoking...
LadyLavender
December 9, 2007
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congrats Kate!!!
myrataal
December 9, 2007
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Simply Stunning ...
well done, Poetess!

Love
Myra
Cat
December 7, 2007

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oh kate, kate, kate.. this is stunning.. just beautiful poetry
the opening line is amazing..

just beautiful

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dp robertson
December 7, 2007

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this is good, isn't?

have you heard her soil as it listens to the promise
of water

what a nice way of describing it.

David
Rowan
December 3, 2007

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no I haven't...
but you have a knack for making me look deeper and actually visualizing her.
Beautiful.
Swan song
November 23, 2007
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This is truly an awesome poem. I had to read this several times and loved it each time
Virgoan
November 22, 2007
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Magnifico!
Wow! I am awestruck.
Eusebius
November 19, 2007

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bravo
Short, yes, but chock full of fine poetic phrasings...a lovely piece of poetry indeed... bravo... bravo... bravo...
Suzanne Dia
November 19, 2007

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sounds like you've been tickled by your muse eh

this is lovely, kate
the poems in this collection are always so tender.

they make me smile.
michael thomas
November 18, 2007
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delicate Kate. delicate and beautiful.
Estel-amour
November 18, 2007

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an amazing opening stanza, and a powerful closing stanza... this is just some amazing writing, dear poetess... thank you for sharing, and very good luck in the contest. My critical honesty? You'll kick butt in it

Be blessed
Zach
LadyLavender
November 17, 2007
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stunning kate...stunning!
naked roots
November 17, 2007
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beautifully done...
Nicolette
November 17, 2007

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This is marvelous poetry... I love flowers, I love flower metaphors in poetry and I just love this blue bell and the questions she asks!!

~ Nicolette
graphite
November 17, 2007

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have you tasted
her voice
on the lips of a wind
she breathes to you
with tongue,

or inhaled her scent,
a bluebell at dawn?

-my favourite question. you have great grip on moving imagery. very clever sis.