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shape of a join

 
 

 

 

 
this shape is made of seams

where nerves gather to trade

mystery-

each sensitive to the pressure of care:
 
in the hollow as thigh becomes hip
or the dip of collarbone, merging
limb to chest;
 
secrets tucked behind buckling knees
and where forefinger meets thumb, caught
in a web of flesh;
 
where an arm halved makes a whole
and a kiss between head
and torso,
pools to shape neck;
 
where fingers trade warmth
on keyboards
and mind reflects other.
 
the shape of our join

has seams too sensitive

to go unnoticed.
 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Cat gold member
    December 2, 2007
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    beautiful...


  • Nicolette gold member
    November 27, 2007

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    This is gorgeous poetry - great application of metaphor here. I loved the opening stanza – and the sense of mystery….in a lovely understated way, yet the images so fresh and powerful – especially the “sensitive to the pressure of care” – wonderful! I liked the sense of touch here…..the physical and sensually charged way through which we shape each other emotionally and the way it binds. I truly love this poem – a very strong contender. This is beautiful poetry and a wonderful and creative interpretation of the contest theme. Thank you so much for this entry.

    ~ Nicolette


  • Suzanne Dia gold member
    November 19, 2007
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    i like this


  • Namita silver member
    November 19, 2007

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    Yep, tanzanite said it. SPECTACULAR!

    "where an arm halved makes a whole
    and a kiss between head
    and torso,
    pools to shape neck"

    ooo!! all of this is absolutely lovely! Gorgeous write, Kate.

    ~Namita


  • ellipsist
    November 18, 2007

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    sensual, in a very unique way... I love the shapes and connections described with such gentility ...this is quite incredible.... such delicate wording to describe where bones converge, which, if taken another direction, could have been harsh imagery...

    I'll admit, the first few descriptions made me wonder about the title, thought it might have been intended to be "the shape of a joint"

    I'll expose you to nothing further of this illiterate sounding comment...


  • tanzanite
    November 17, 2007

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    Spectacular!!!

    May I borrow your muse. This was something I could see coming from Nicolette's pen (and that is a major compliment). I loved this.


  • Grunts Girl
    November 17, 2007
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    this is beautiful


  • LadyLavender gold member
    November 17, 2007

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    EK...have I told you lately that I admire you? If I haven't here it goes:

    I admire the sh*t out of you...LOL

    I really mean that. You are amazing as is this write.


  • graphite
    November 17, 2007
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    ... this is truly sweet!


  • Naridill gold member
    November 17, 2007
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    Was this meant to make me cry...

    You are divine.

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